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Re: Mean Time to Breakdown — (Iwanako, Divergence){u 10/20/2

Posted: Mon Nov 11, 2013 6:09 pm
by Leaty
(deadfic)

Re: Mean Time to Breakdown — (Iwanako, Divergence){u 10/20/2

Posted: Mon Nov 11, 2013 11:48 pm
by griffon8
I suppose it's only within other fanfic that it's mentioned, but would clubs have a minimum membership to exist? Student Council being an exception; that has to exist.

Then again, if people want to get together for the "Sit Under The Big Tree In Front Of The Dorm After Class" club, who's going to stop them?

Re: Mean Time to Breakdown — (Iwanako, Divergence){u 10/20/2

Posted: Tue Nov 12, 2013 12:10 am
by Leaty
(deadfic)

Scene Twelve

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 1:21 am
by Leaty
(deadfic)

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 1:53 am
by AntonSlavik020
Great chapter! I don't have a whole lot to say, except that you are the master of cliff hangers. This is at least the second very good one in this story. I can't wait for the conversation between Iwanako and Lilly. I can't help but feel they will get along well.

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 3:39 am
by Solistor
I place the thousand curses of my Irish ancestors upon thee, you magnificent, glorious bastard. This chapter was incredible and well worth the wait. I'd wish I had a time machine so i could jump to when this story was finished, but then I wouldn't get to have the experience of being a "regular" :P

I await the next chapter with bated breath.

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 6:12 am
by bhtooefr
Wow, I think Emi can now have twice the anal she could have before, with how Iwanako tore her a new one. Shame she's not on the track team any more, and therefore can't use the shed. :P

And, she really deserved that.

Looking forward to how you handle Hanako and Lilly here.

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 7:15 am
by Comrade
Haha! Take that emi!

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 8:20 am
by Mirage_GSM
How are you any different from a drunk driver who only feels bad after he finally spins out and murders half a family?
Ouch!
I can't wait for the conversation between Iwanako and Lilly. I can't help but feel they will get along well.
You think so? I can't really picture Lilly getting along with someone as jaded as Iwanako is right now...
Great chapter again. I'd say you hit Emi's character perfectly.
I was a bit surprised Iwanako was starting to regret her words so soon. Makes me hope they'll still make out up sometime in the future when she's calmed down more. I actually think the two of them might have gotten along quite well if it hadn't been for the incident. Iwanako might just need someone as chipper as Emi to pull her from her depression.

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 8:56 am
by Kyler Thatch
I don't see any problem with Hanako suddenly popping up for a visit. Almost expected it actually. The different sort of encounter Iwanako has with her (compared to Hisao) is enough to convince me that there could be a very different dynamic going on. That's the sort of thing I love about this story, to be completely honest. All the ways in which Iwanako is not simply a genderswapped Hisao.

If anything, what surprises me is that Lilly is also there. Though one could probably chalk that up to Hanako not wanting to venture into the city (or wherever that hospital is) on her own.

Also, I imagine Emi must be absolutely devastated. Not only because she was thoroughly chewed out by Iwanako, but because she was forced off the track team. No more Emi at her Emiest.

Also also, how do you forbid someone from attending a festival?

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 9:23 am
by Mirage_GSM
Also also, how do you forbid someone from attending a festival?
Easy. Confine her to her room on that day.
Also, I imagine Emi must be absolutely devastated. Not only because she was thoroughly chewed out by Iwanako, but because she was forced off the track team. No more Emi at her Emiest.
No, Iwanako's accusations probably hit her much harder, especially since they are completely justified and probably hit a sore spot as well.
Being taken off the track team doesn't mean she isn't allowed to run anymore - it would be hard to forbid anyone from doing that - just that she can't participate in competitions.

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 11:09 am
by Blasphemy
This kills the Emi.

Excellent chapter, poor Emi got obliterated in that room :(
No matter how you look at the delivery, Iwanako's message does contain some truths. Emi's behavior simply was extremely negligence considering the school she's at.

Still man, while I can totally emphasize with Iwanako's outburst, there was obviously no real malicious intent with this attempt of an apology. Emi was even very honest (don't know if necessarily on purpose) and admitted that she's almost screwed up before and got cautioned many times. That didn't help matters here though obviously, neither did some other choices of words.

Coping with all this, especially knowing that Iwanako's accusations are true, will be tough. Doubt she can run that off anytime soon... Doesn't help that Rin probably isn't the best at consolation and I imagine part of the student body is going to antagonize her for her actions. Almost killing another student out of negligence, uh oh. That probably doesn't go well.

Well, I must imagine there is still much to come with Iwanako and Emi. Iwanako feels bad for her outburst, even if kinda justified, and the both of them would probably try to avoid ever running (pun intended) into on another from now on. So I'll look forward to see how this conflict evolves. Unless suddenly Iwanako's dad becomes furious knowing about all this and demands Emi's expulsion and that's that?!? Who knows!

Also man, that must be a terrible feeling for Meiko, waiting outside and listening to her daughter getting chewed on like this, uh oh.

I'm curious about Hanako's and LIlly's appearance, but since so far you keep delivering I'll expect this to make sense. Cannot exactly remember how her encounter with Hanako went, so I'll have to reread that.

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 2:36 pm
by Reese8
Ah, the Emi introduction!
"The would-be Destroyer of my World."
Well, the second Emi introduction. Yeah, not a very good first impression there…

"nacreous"
Yay, it's back!

And the probability of an Emi route just jumped off a cliff, not that that was too terribly unexpected.

"What was that back there? When have I ever been so wantonly callous?

I’ve never lost my temper like that before. Never in my entire life. I usually can’t even raise my own voice without feeling self-conscious. And yet… that just happened. I completely exploded at a total stranger, in the most crass way possible. It’s like… like I don’t even know who I am anymore."
Well, um, to be fair, she did nearly kill you. Not deliberately, sure, but "through extreme negligence" isn't exactly a free pass.

"Nothing short of a total disaster would ever make me come back."
"go back", I think it ought to be.

Hee, and the probability of Stonefish* Stoneflower is climbing! :D

Oh, and the Lilly meeting, too.

Aaaand that's the end of the chapter. The responsible part of me is relieved, as I have homework that I really ought to be doing, but most of me much prefers reading this to working PDEs. :)
Kyler Thatch wrote:The different sort of encounter Iwanako has with her (compared to Hisao) is enough to convince me that there could be a very different dynamic going on.
Right; I still think that that's not just important but pivotal.
Blasphemy wrote:I'm curious about Hanako's and LIlly's appearance, but since so far you keep delivering I'll expect this to make sense. Cannot exactly remember how her encounter with Hanako went, so I'll have to reread that.
Iwanako, having no idea that the prevailing opinion was that Hanako ought to be handled with kid gloves if at all, walked right up to her and asked her for help.


*edited to correct wrong name

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 4:41 pm
by bhtooefr
Stonefish as a ship name would mean that Iwanako would practice self-love.

Surely you mean Stoneflower? ;)

Re: Iwanako: Mean Time to Breakdown {updated 11/20/2013}

Posted: Wed Nov 20, 2013 5:05 pm
by Mader Levap
Emi deserved it. She should be happy they did not expelled her on spot (for sure Nurse doing - he did everything he could to prevent that). Mentioning drunk driver would be a little too much, if Iwanako knew about it, but well. Accidental obliteration is accidental.
Presence of Hanako and Lilly IS surprising. Wonder what business they have? Do they know about obliteration of Emi? Will see how it goes.