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Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end]
Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 10:49 am
by BlackWaltzTheThird
Doomish. Bro. I only know you on here, and I know nothing of your personal life. However, if it's anything even remotely like the situation presented in this piece... all my feels man. Whatever's going on in your life right now, all the best to make it better bro. We're here for ya.
Cheers, BlackWaltz.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end]
Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 11:33 am
by The O.H.L.
Bad experiences produce nothing but knowledge of how to avoid more of them. We all have bad days, but I can say I haven't experienced anything as jarring as that. I hope you can deal with everything, I hope you learn from everything, I hope you keep up with the writing which I'm assuming is therapeutic, and I hope, I hope hope hope, that you can make through anything and everything. Your writings proves one thing to me, and that is that you are a very talented individual.
Make sure you stay safe, sane, and happy.
And to make sure this is on topic, good story. But I guess that happens when you know exactly how the characters are feeling.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end]
Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 2:21 pm
by Doomish
Forget it.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end]
Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 2:51 pm
by DaGarver
Dammit, Doomish. You go and start leading us on with happy writings, then you drop this bomb on us. Beautifully written and dripping with emotion.
Doomish wrote:After she blew up on me and I blew up on her (as the first chapter was, again, almost exactly what happened), we stayed seperate for a while. I wasn't going to kill myself and I wasn't on a roof about to jump, that's for sure. We were in the park where we had a lot of our quiet moments together, as a matter of fact. I went there by myself one day, and it was raining and awful, and who should show up but the girl herself. She said she knew she'd find me there, and we talked everything out. We agreed it would be best if we never spoke again, and so we didn't. We ruined our relationship at the exact same time, blew up on each other at the exact same time, and then separated from one another mentally and emotionally at the exact same time. It was over between us as soon as she told me she was cheating on me, but at first I thought I could fix it. I thought maybe I could patch things together, but we were through already, and I ended up suffering for my attempt. She saw how terrible I felt and just broke it off. I've never really recovered from it; I loved her, and then she really, truly did betray everything I thought I knew.
*bro-hug* I've been there. I know what it's like. I've felt that pain before, of having everything you thought you knew ripped out from under you. It sucks hard, but you learn to trust again after you've had time to heal. I don't know how recent this was for you, but I'm confident that you're strong enough to find your way through it if you haven't already.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end]
Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 2:58 pm
by Bagheera
Heh. I like thinking things can be fixed.
Doomish wrote:After she blew up on me and I blew up on her (as the first chapter was, again, almost exactly what happened), we stayed seperate for a while. I wasn't going to kill myself and I wasn't on a roof about to jump, that's for sure. We were in the park where we had a lot of our quiet moments together, as a matter of fact. I went there by myself one day, and it was raining and awful, and who should show up but the girl herself. She said she knew she'd find me there, and we talked everything out. We agreed it would be best if we never spoke again, and so we didn't. We ruined our relationship at the exact same time, blew up on each other at the exact same time, and then separated from one another mentally and emotionally at the exact same time. It was over between us as soon as she told me she was cheating on me, but at first I thought I could fix it. I thought maybe I could patch things together, but we were through already, and I ended up suffering for my attempt. She saw how terrible I felt and just broke it off. I've never really recovered from it; I loved her, and then she really, truly did betray everything I thought I knew.
What about the other girl, the one who made the call? I guess it doesn't matter, since she's not the one you were in love with to begin with. I guess it's just a futile hope that something in the whole mess was salvageable.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 11:20 pm
by Elcor
Fricken Hell Doomish I'm crying over here.
I know some of those emotions, I was in five year relationship that ended after I found out she simply had been using me and had been cheating since the two and half year mark.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Sun May 13, 2012 12:57 pm
by Roamin12
Holy shit. As much as I enjoyed this, the thought of any of this being based off of personal experience sucks. We've all had bad stuff happen to us, but things like that hurt, deeply.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2012 11:10 pm
by LOL WUT
My thoughts on the first part
LOL WTF DID I JUST READ
My thoughts on the end of the epilogue
*Sniff* *Sniff* Somebody gather all the bros and give him a bro hug
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2012 11:33 pm
by Guest
Fuckin' hell, Doomish.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2012 12:03 am
by Helbereth
I don't even know what to write here.
I've had some trips in my journey, but I don't think I've ever come that close to falling. I can't even identify with having my heart ripped out like that - perhaps because I've never offered it to anyone (who accepted it). I've seen some things. I've known some tales, but all I can really do as I sit here is pray I never have to face something like that. I'm not sure I'd make it through the rainstorm.
I hope writing this brought you some closure.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2012 12:49 pm
by Oddball
It's not a bad story, but this is a version of Hisao I cannot relate to or agree with at all.
Personally, in his place, I wouldn't have forgiven Miki. Ever. She stepped way over the line on that one.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2012 2:10 pm
by nemz
Oddball wrote:Personally, in his place, I wouldn't have forgiven Miki. Ever. She stepped way over the line on that one.
Agreed, though just because he latching onto her for support at the end doesn't at all mean he's forgiven her or that they have much of a future together. It just means they didn't end things quite as abruptly as it first appeared.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2012 2:21 pm
by Bagheera
I've seen people forgive much worse. Sometimes the relationships involved have even been healthy. It's not all that hard to understand, really; a well-intentioned dick move just doesn't have to be a deal-breaker, particularly when none of the principals are without sin.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2012 2:49 pm
by Oddball
Agreed, though just because he latching onto her for support at the end doesn't at all mean he's forgiven her or that they have much of a future together. It just means they didn't end things quite as abruptly as it first appeared.
Fair enough. Not a bad way of looking at it.
Bagheera wrote:I've seen people forgive much worse.
So have I. I couldn't understand it then either.
I'm not one of those people that can forgive (what I consider) outright betrayal, even if the person had "good" intentions.
Re: In Ruin [Hisao, Miki, Lilly neutral end] [now with epilo
Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2012 2:51 pm
by nemz
It's not just that she butted into things and did what he specifically asked her not to do, but that she did so in the most intentionally hurtful manner she could manage and then when it blew up in her face initially responded with a very off-putting, arrogant front.
There might be a few people out there forgiving enough to put up with that and more, but I'm not one of them.