A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)

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BBZZZZTTTTT

“I'm Suzu's phone and I'm getting a text message.”

BBZZZZTTTTT

“I'm Suzu's phone and I'm getting a text message.”


click OPEN MESSAGE


[Touch his penis alrdy, GAYLORD]

... MIKI !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Damn you, this ate up almost all my time until I have to go to work!
Excellent chapter(s). I was a bit disappointed it turned out to be a dream. Challenged my suspension of disbelief, but that might be just because I never have dreams as detailed or as realistic as this.
Oh, and in the first chapter you mixed up on and no once.
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Great route, super well put together, sat down and read it all in one go, and now I'm itching for more.

Best of luck on continuing your endeavor, and yes I created a forum account just to post this.
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>All these posts of praise
Hmm, may be worth a look
Mirage_GSM wrote:I was a bit disappointed it turned out to be a dream.
>It was a dream all along!
lol nevermind
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Just finished reading the entire route so far in one go and...wow. This is amazing. Please continue. :lol:
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One of the few well-done uses of "All Just A Dream"! And by "well-done", I mean "MY HEART"

Seriously, it was a brilliant, heart-rending use of the otherwise cliched story device.

About the other parts of this update, there's really nothing to critique that I can see. This may sound like empty praise, but it's true.

And don't thank us for loving the story. We should be thanking you for writing the story we're loving. Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to go reread the entirety of the story again.
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You're the number one reason why teachers shouldn't be so negative about having dreams in stories :D
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Well done you magnificent bastard. I feel so... trolled. but in a good way.
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I was wary at first, things were just too perfect.

Hisao wasn't a bumbling ass, he's tossin' dosh like a mad man, rollercoasters? guessIhaveheartproblems.jpeg etc.. and then BAM! You got me with the biggest cliche' in fucking history and I loved it.

Having dreams and reality blurring together like that is going to be one hell of a thing for poor Snoozu to cope with.

Good show Scissorlips.
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I... Uh... But...


*deep inhalation*

Wow. That, was incredible. The little details in there made it special, Suzu's daydreaming made it feel realistic, the pacing was great.
There is but one thing to say to you Scissorlips, and that is please make some more good.
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Once again Mr Lips you have crafted an exceptional installation of your amazing story, thank you for this.

I thought that Hisao was going to HHHNNNGGG on the rollercoaster, but I was suspicious after that. . . Then Suzu woke up and. . and . . and. . . manly tears...

You really are doing a great job with this and it hurts a little inside that I know eventually it will end, but I know, no matter what, that it will be brilliant because everything you have done so far has been par-excellance!

Again, thank you <3
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I think everything is so riveting because it's told from Suzu's perspective

Hisao is so ... bland. Suzu has an amazing personality with her hilarious inner monologue jokes, her battleship duel with the grim reaper, her mysterious former love, the fact that she's just living in between dreams ... AAAHHHHH, it's epicly amazing.
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turbulentDuvet wrote:I thought that Hisao was going to HHHNNNGGG on the rollercoaster, but I was suspicious after that. . . Then Suzu woke up and. . and . . and. . . manly tears...
In hindsight that was a fantastic clue that something was up, since she doesn't know about his heart condition, but at the time I just thought it was Hisao being a dumbass. I was distracted by the weird classmate sighting, thinking that maybe Lezard was stalking them and that would be the conflict of the route.
Emi > Lilly > Misha > Hanako = Rin > Shizune... I might just prefer women who put out a lot.
Mind-stickiness: Hanako > Misha = Shizune > Rin > Emi > Lilly
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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 6/6)

Post by grey_ »

Wait wait.
So Mutou opened a door, stood there, doing nothing, then Suzu closed the door on him? A teacher? And he just stood there?
lolwhut

Anyway, I really enjoyed this. Thank you!
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