Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2/15]

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated: 11/

Post by Bradycardia » Fri Dec 19, 2014 2:50 am

It's about Two O'Clock right now, and formatting is the least of my worries. I am tired. I want to sleep. I can't feel my eyes.

If you see any issues, please refrain from looking at them for more than three seconds. Thank you, have a nice day.

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Post by HoneyBakedHam » Fri Dec 19, 2014 3:42 am

Sorry, I enjoyed being notified of my first subscription update and reading it. I can't kill you guys, yet. There's still more gold to come of this. :lol:

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated: 11/

Post by Craftyatom » Fri Dec 19, 2014 9:22 am

Bradycardia wrote:If you see any issues, please refrain from looking at them for more than three seconds.
Damn, and here I was ready to make a myriad of corrections... Oh well :P

All the issues I had were merely syntactical, though - I thoroughly enjoyed the content of this release, and am excited for whatever happens next!
Bradycardia wrote:Working with a partner (or partners) is really a great thing. At first I didn't know how it would turn out, and for a while I actually kinda regretted it. Here I had a stranger taking part in MY story. It seemed absurd! But after you remember that the character is not yours to begin with, things become a lot more calm. It becomes much more of a shared experience.
I remember writing with a partner... Fun times. Given, he was my best friend, and I don't think I could possibly have stood doing such a thing with anyone else, but then again, I'm an introvert, so don't take my word on social situations.
Bradycardia wrote:Hisao is a thinker (at least ours is). Everything he does is pretty calculated. Here we have a character who just had everything taken from him. He lost all his friends, his life, his home, and his chance with a smoking hot girl. He came to Yamaku and was just barely able to patch things up before it was too late. He has been just as lucky as unlucky. Don't you think that he might be a bit, I dunno, careful with Aoi? In the last few weeks, Hisao has struggled and fought to re-create his old life. He has a home, a life outside of his studies, and some amazing friends. All the puzzle pieces fall pretty close together, and now there is only one piece missing. I know that I would be a bit cautious if I was that close to getting what I really wanted. He is trying to relive the past, and there is a reason this route is called "Can you live a new Dawn?"
Ah - this makes sense. I have trouble answering questions from a character's point of view, which is probably why I'm so prone to getting bad endings... Sigh. Seriously, I only have about a 20% record on this stuff, either due to social ineptitude or misplaced optimism. But on the topic of your story, thanks for the clarification, and I understand what you mean.
Bradycardia wrote:Also, thank you for the encouragement on the finals! I A'ced all of my exams! One more semester of High School left and I finally get to leave this place. Forever.

I could not possibly be more scared.
Ah, yes, this ordeal - I can't say I was in your mindset a year ago, when I as in your position, but I'm also very bad at worrying about things. Congratulations on your scores, good luck with apps (if you're applying places), and do your best to cherish being a second-semester senior!
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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated: 11/

Post by Mirage_GSM » Fri Dec 19, 2014 10:06 pm

Bradycardia wrote:It's about Two O'Clock right now, and formatting is the least of my worries. I am tired. I want to sleep. I can't feel my eyes.

If you see any issues, please refrain from looking at them for more than three seconds. Thank you, have a nice day.

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No need. Except for a misplaced apostrophe here:
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there's nothing you should worry about…
Then again, it's three o'clock here at the moment, so I might have missed stuff :-)

Still enjoying this story very much, but now I'm going to bed…
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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated: 12/

Post by AntonSlavik020 » Sat Dec 20, 2014 10:56 am

I'm enjoying this story too much to kill you guys. :)

Anyways, really enjoyed this update. That ending was all kinds of cute.
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Post by Mohn_Jadden » Sun Dec 21, 2014 5:31 pm

Hello readers. I have good and bad news, depending on the way you see it really.

About the time we were wrapping up Part 6, I received a message on Reddit from a member of Watercress Studios, saying that he's observed our writing and wants Brady and I to join him in working for Watercress Studios, creators of the Avitus VN. We've been hired (I guess that's what you would call it. We aren't getting paid.) to be assistant writers for Natalie. (best girl).

Now, what this all means is that we'll probably be taking an extended leave of absence for writing this. We aren't sure if we'll continue it or not, as it is what brought us together. Still, writing a VN is going to be an interesting challenge for us both, and we're certainly up for the task.

Thank you for reading this far, and sorry for this unforseeen change of events. PM me if you want more info, but I've already told most of what matters.

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Post by AntonSlavik020 » Sun Dec 21, 2014 9:56 pm

Congats and good luck! And as a VN fan, I'm sure I'll play it when its finished.
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Post by Craftyatom » Sun Dec 21, 2014 10:19 pm

Mohn_Jadden wrote:extended leave of absence
Well, I'm not exactly happy about the story stopping here, I was really enjoying it, but nevertheless, good luck on your ventures - I know y'all can do wonderfully.

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Post by Peorth » Thu Dec 25, 2014 11:49 pm

Bollocks, just when I'd caught up...
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Post by Mohn_Jadden » Sat Dec 27, 2014 3:12 am

Peorth wrote:Bollocks, just when I'd caught up...
Yeah well, shit happens. Heh.

Don't worry, we aren't completely abandoning it, but depending on how much we're needed at Watercress (unfortunately, taking a look at the work on the girl we're assigned to, we'll have to be really involved on that) it might be awhile before we can come back.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated: 12/

Post by Peorth » Sat Dec 27, 2014 3:26 am

Mohn_Jadden wrote:
Peorth wrote:Bollocks, just when I'd caught up...
Yeah well, shit happens. Heh.

Don't worry, we aren't completely abandoning it, but depending on how much we're needed at Watercress (unfortunately, taking a look at the work on the girl we're assigned to, we'll have to be really involved on that) it might be awhile before we can come back.
Well, good luck, and, as they say, absence makes the heart grow fonder!
(or Absence Makes the Heart Go Yonder, if I want to show my age and make a reference some people might not get.)
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Post by Mohn_Jadden » Mon May 04, 2015 9:46 pm

Ayy.

So after a long, long while. (Jesus, it's been 6 months?) Brady's life got in the way, and he had to resign from Watercress, but not without looking back toward the Aoi Pseudo Route. I'm sill currently a member of Watercress, but looking at this now, it's a shame we left it so early.

So for better, or for worse, The Aoi Pseudo Route just might be getting some updates in the future.

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Post by Solistor » Mon May 04, 2015 10:21 pm

Mohn_Jadden wrote:So for better, or for worse, The Aoi Pseudo Route just might be getting some updates in the future.
Slammin'. I've been silently following this since it started and quite liked it. It'll be nice to see it continue!
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Post by FelOnyx » Mon May 04, 2015 10:51 pm

Mohn_Jadden wrote:Ayy.

So after a long, long while. (Jesus, it's been 6 months?) Brady's life got in the way, and he had to resign from Watercress, but not without looking back toward the Aoi Pseudo Route. I'm sill currently a member of Watercress, but looking at this now, it's a shame we left it so early.

So for better, or for worse, The Aoi Pseudo Route just might be getting some updates in the future.
Nice man, looking forward to it. I only got around to reading it after you had already put the story on hold, but I really liked it, it'll be great to see new updates. And hey, six months is still a lot less than how long "certain individuals" have been gone. :P
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Post by Mohn_Jadden » Mon May 04, 2015 11:41 pm

Solistor wrote:Slammin'. I've been silently following this since it started and quite liked it. It'll be nice to see it continue!
FelOnyx wrote: Nice man, looking forward to it. I only got around to reading it after you had already put the story on hold, but I really liked it, it'll be great to see new updates. And hey, six months is still a lot less than how long "certain individuals" have been gone. :P
Thank you guys for the support, I'll begin to look at drafting the next scene, the track meet.

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