Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2/15]

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by Alpacalypse » Sun Oct 04, 2015 3:53 pm

Mohn_Jadden wrote:I believe she did wear the swagger vest when Keiko, Hisao, and her went to the Shanghai before, when Aoi finished it off by talking about stars and stuff.
*Goes back and checks*

... ffs.

However, I do agree that aviators are pretty rad 8)
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Post by swampie2 » Sun Oct 04, 2015 4:40 pm

I'm a little late on this one, but still.
Bradycardia wrote:I make a noise somewhere between a muffled cry and a choked sob as I realize that the sandwich she gave me was made from the elder god’s ambrosia. It feels like absolute flavor heaven in my mouth, every different taste and hint going perfectly with one another.
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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated: 11/

Post by Mohn_Jadden » Sun Oct 04, 2015 4:45 pm

swampie2 wrote:I'm a little late on this one, but still.
Bradycardia wrote:I make a noise somewhere between a muffled cry and a choked sob as I realize that the sandwich she gave me was made from the elder god’s ambrosia. It feels like absolute flavor heaven in my mouth, every different taste and hint going perfectly with one another.
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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by Mohn_Jadden » Mon Oct 05, 2015 6:27 pm

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Toying around with an idea. Might make an appearance in the story.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by AntonSlavik020 » Mon Oct 05, 2015 7:10 pm

Seems interesting. And since I text by dragging my finger across the screen, proper punctuation comes with it. I guess they're using flip phones, though I suppose if this takes place in, what, 07? That makes sense.
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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by Mohn_Jadden » Mon Oct 05, 2015 7:15 pm

AntonSlavik020 wrote:Seems interesting. And since I text by dragging my finger across the screen, proper punctuation comes with it. I guess they're using flip phones, though I suppose if this takes place in, what, 07? That makes sense.
07? Could've sworn it was in 06. I dunno. In any case, the dates aren't really all that important.

The not-using-proper-punctuation is from a bit of Keiko rubbing off on Aoi though, least, that's how I see it.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by swampie2 » Mon Oct 05, 2015 8:23 pm

Mohn_Jadden wrote:TEXT

Toying around with an idea. Might make an appearance in the story.
That line about the ps2 really cracked me up. 8)

I'd be a bit worried if Hisao dropped in for a visit at 5am though.
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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by Mohn_Jadden » Mon Oct 05, 2015 8:26 pm

swampie2 wrote:That line about the ps2 really cracked me up. 8)

I'd be a bit worried if Hisao dropped in for a visit at 5am though.

Darn, I could've sworn I changed that to 'PM'. In any case, the generation of the game-system is yet to be determined. It's her father's actually, a character that I hope to incorporate soon.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by Mohn_Jadden » Mon Oct 05, 2015 9:38 pm

Change of plan, instead of the next part being the final one, we're going to have another Aoi-centric chapter. With guest appearances from Shizune, Misha, and The 'SKULLS' Parasite Unit.

Sorry! We just want to make sure that Part 2 is sufficiently fleshed out before moving onto Part 3.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by HoneyBakedHam » Tue Oct 06, 2015 8:39 am

Mohn_Jadden wrote:Change of plan, instead of the next part being the final one, we're going to have another Aoi-centric chapter. With guest appearances from Shizune, Misha, and The 'SKULLS' Parasite Unit.

Sorry! We just want to make sure that Part 2 is sufficiently fleshed out before moving onto Part 3.
Gah, hate the SKULLS Unit! Total bullshit and a pain in the assto deal with! :evil:

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2

Post by Mohn_Jadden » Tue Oct 06, 2015 11:24 pm

HoneyBakedHam wrote:Gah, hate the SKULLS Unit! Total bullshit and a pain in the assto deal with! :evil:

Sorry, got me on a MGSV rant. :oops:
Don't do the extreme version of the one @ the airport. Did it like 35 times before I managed to do it.

Anyway, I'm currently shaping up the new part. Looks like Hiko will be seen again, along with an implementation of the thing I talked about earlier.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2/15]

Post by sloth4 » Wed May 02, 2018 8:47 pm

I really enjoyed this and I'm glad I found it while scouring the forum. I wonder if it's easier or harder to right a story about a character with no real backstory in canon, since it gives you so much freedom to do your own thing.

Also, congrats on getting tapped to work on a VN, sounds pretty exciting.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2/15]

Post by TheNexus97 » Sun Jul 22, 2018 11:24 am

Discovered this fic today and OH MY GOSH AOI IS SO CUTE I MUST PROTECT HER.

Is this story dead or what? Please tell me it's not dead :(

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2/15]

Post by QuietlySomething » Sun Jul 22, 2018 12:11 pm

TheNexus97 wrote:
Sun Jul 22, 2018 11:24 am
Discovered this fic today and OH MY GOSH AOI IS SO CUTE I MUST PROTECT HER.

Is this story dead or what? Please tell me it's not dead :(
Well given that it hasn’t updated in 2 1/2 years, if it isn’t dead then it’s in a very deep sleep.

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Re: Universal Gravitation: An Aoi Pseudo-Route [Updated 10/2/15]

Post by PKMNthiefChris » Sun Jul 22, 2018 12:17 pm

QuietlySomething wrote:
Sun Jul 22, 2018 12:11 pm
TheNexus97 wrote:
Sun Jul 22, 2018 11:24 am
Discovered this fic today and OH MY GOSH AOI IS SO CUTE I MUST PROTECT HER.

Is this story dead or what? Please tell me it's not dead :(
Well given that it hasn’t updated in 2 1/2 years, if it isn’t dead then it’s in a very deep sleep.
One of the two considering both dudes are still working on the other VN.

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