Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]

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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]

Post by brythain » Wed May 28, 2014 10:58 am

Silentcook wrote:If you have to ask whether someone understood something in your writing, then you should not leave that something in, ever.
I have to admit I don't understand most of this piece, so I've refrained from making substantive comments of any kind.
Post-Yamaku, what happens? After The Dream is a mosaic that follows everyone to the (sometimes) bitter end.
Main Index (Complete)Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/AkiraHideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of SuzuSakura—The Kenji Saga.
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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]

Post by GodlyVirus » Wed May 28, 2014 1:40 pm

Ahhh man... now I have to take out the Mahou Shoujo scence... now I'm all kinds of depressed... no... I'll leave it in... it doesn't make sense even if you know what he's saying. *Accomplished Fan Fiction Writer*
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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]

Post by Mirage_GSM » Wed May 28, 2014 3:26 pm

The only reference I thought I got was the one to drug abuse, but that was apparently not intentional.

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Emi > Misha > Hanako > Lilly > Rin > Shizune

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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]

Post by GodlyVirus » Wed May 28, 2014 5:31 pm

Drug Abuse, what???
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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]

Post by GodlyVirus » Sat Jun 07, 2014 3:42 am

Hey hey! I'm back after speaking French. though to be fair I was never gone because I was using a differ... I mean, I was a lurker. Yes... A lurker... A lurker who put up with Creepypasta's editing format for a grand total of 2 minutes to write his story... So what was the lesson or even basic importance to this thread? All future parts of Steel will now be in French.

"Je plaisante,"

Also my signature has been changed to relect the new character development, take it as you wish.

"Je suis en train banni pour cela, Ne suis-je?"


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"I'm kidding,"

" I'm getting banned for this, aren't I?"

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