Miki's First Time

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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by Oddball » Mon Mar 31, 2014 4:43 pm

I was expecting something totally different.
That's kinda what i was aiming for. :twisted:
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by TheGoatman » Wed Apr 02, 2014 6:29 am

NotSoClassy wrote:I Imagine what would someone think after skipping the whole thing and reading just the two last lines.
I always do this to see if there's anything more to the story(part 2, etc) and my expectations were pulled in a direction very different from what I got. Still pleased nonetheless, good miki fics are always nice(scratch that, good fics are always nice periodthat was a terrible pun)
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by Mahorfeus » Wed Apr 02, 2014 7:48 am

Needless commentary here, but I have the impression that if Miki is that opposed to having her stump touched by someone she wants to get intimate with, then she probably shouldn't be trying to go that far to begin with. If that makes any sense.
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by Oddball » Wed Apr 02, 2014 10:21 am

Mahorfeus wrote:Needless commentary here, but I have the impression that if Miki is that opposed to having her stump touched by someone she wants to get intimate with, then she probably shouldn't be trying to go that far to begin with. If that makes any sense.
I always welcome "needless" commentary on my stuff. It always interests me to see how people interpret what I've written. Although in this case, I don't disagree with you completely.

Of course, nobody ever said the decisions the characters have made always make sense either.
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by Mader Levap » Sat Apr 12, 2014 8:06 pm

Loved it. It is so rare to see something like that written realistically. Especially that in end nothing actually happened, except slightly more damaged Hisao. Poor guy...

Would like to see continuation. That would be hilarious. How many tries it would take? And obvious "What, already?" line. :lol:

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Oddball wrote:instead it came out as “Shit! Shit! Fuck! Shit!” he wanted to run into the hall calling for help
It was supposed to be "She wanted to...", right?
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by Sea » Sat Apr 12, 2014 11:59 pm

Helbereth wrote:
NotSoClassy wrote:I Imagine what would someone think after skipping the whole thing and reading just the two last lines.
They would probably assume this fic was not so classy.
having actually done the exact thing, I was rather perturbed, but I went back through just for the hell of it and the good reviews and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Perhaps people should stop trying to confront the curse head on and make one shots such as this.
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by English_Gentleman » Mon Apr 14, 2014 3:35 pm

Quite please with the authentic scene, quite please indeed. :D

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Post by Comrade » Mon Apr 14, 2014 3:55 pm

English_Gentleman wrote:Quite please with the authentic scene, quite please indeed. :D
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by griffon8 » Mon Apr 14, 2014 5:49 pm

Comrade wrote:
English_Gentleman wrote:Quite please with the authentic scene, quite please indeed. :D
What
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by SpunkySix » Thu May 15, 2014 1:40 am

Ha, awesome. Felt natural, and it was sweet too.
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by Munchenhausen » Thu May 15, 2014 6:37 pm

Ahaha that was great :D Giggled at the leather peeing clowns part. Mate, there's nothing better than a bit of banter between a couple.

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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by Darkerling » Thu May 15, 2014 11:54 pm

Wasn't sure what to expect at first, but as a kept reading, the more I liked it.
Sea wrote:.... Perhaps people should stop trying to confront the curse head on and make one shots such as this.
I've read/heard of the Miki curse, and one shots might be the place to start...
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by poopooface » Mon Jun 09, 2014 9:46 pm

NotSoClassy wrote:I Imagine what would someone think after skipping the whole thing and reading just the two last lines.
I did that exact thing and just shrugged.
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Re: Miki's First Time

Post by nemz » Tue Jun 10, 2014 1:11 am

Amusing, but awkward as hell. Seems just right. :lol:
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