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by Mahorfeus » Tue Jul 01, 2014 4:59 pm
One of my favorites to be sure. Lilly's death did not come off as being ridiculously convoluted, as character death often does in fanfiction. On top of that, the fic actually made her death mean something, in a sense. I also feel like the characters were very well written. They were still recognizable as their younger selves, but you could tell that they've grown over the years, and not just when they described how they have. I appreciate that Hisao has picked up a few quirks that make him more interesting without making him unrecognizable - his taste in jazz, for example.
However, I was somewhat disappointed by Shizune's absence in the story. I don't usually complain about stuff like this, not being much of a writer myself, but I feel that her inclusion would have been natural. She is, after all, family, and Lilly's route happens to be the only one where the two of them seem to reconcile on some degree.
There were also some moments that were just a tad cheesy, like Hanako's big speech. I suppose inspirational speeches are a little cheesy in general, and I imagine that they are very difficult to author. I somewhat feel like this is just coming from someone standing outside as an observer and not as someone "in" the story so to speak. Let me know if that makes no damn sense.
"A very small degree of hope is sufficient to cause the birth of love." -Stendhal
The verdict is (finally) in:
Hanako > Rin > Emi > Lilly = Shizune
