Yamaku Book Club (20210104 Red Fish Blue Fish)

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Razoredge
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201207 The Ooe Way—A Natsume Fic)

Post by Razoredge » Sun Dec 06, 2020 11:54 am

When I see a Natsume fic, I'm happy. I'm not very fond of the writing, I have to say, but so far, it's not too shabby. It's a bit forced, yeah, a bit akward too, and yes, writing an article about the new student would be really akward.

That being said, that was quite a fun read. Waaaaaaay better than the last 4 ones. In fact, everything is better than the last 4 ones.
Lilly = Akira > Miki = Hanako > Emi > Rin > Shizune

Stuff I'm currently writing : Beyond the haze : A Lilly Satou pseudo-route, Lullaby of an open heart : A Saki pseudo-route & Sakura Blossom : A way with Hisao

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201207 The Ooe Way—A Natsume Fic)

Post by Fourthsubset66 » Sun Dec 20, 2020 4:51 pm

I feel like this wasn't too bad. Maybe forced in some places so it didn't exactly feel natural but it was enjoyable nonetheless.

I don't think I have seen a completed Natsume or Naomi fic out there though so I can't really compare this to anything :(

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201207 The Ooe Way—A Natsume Fic)

Post by woohootouhou » Sat Jan 02, 2021 11:26 am

The first part was quite a bit better than the second. Felt a lot more natural both with the characters and general pacing.

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (Red Fish Blue Fish)

Post by Oddball » Sat Jan 02, 2021 11:42 am

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It's the first book club of the New Year. Hooray! Hope everyone had a nice one.

To start things off with, we're going to look at something special. Me.
(Or rather, I story I wrote.)

What a perfect way to start the new year, right?

:D

Red Fish Blue Fish by Oddball.

This story features Lilly and Akira when they were younger.
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201207 The Ooe Way—A Natsume Fic)

Post by Razoredge » Sat Jan 02, 2021 12:49 pm

This was so cute. I love pieces like that, about the characters childhood. Some sisters action is what I needed, I don't even know why, but I needed it. This was wonderfully made, you did a really great job. Thanks for that, really, I mean it. It was great.
Lilly = Akira > Miki = Hanako > Emi > Rin > Shizune

Stuff I'm currently writing : Beyond the haze : A Lilly Satou pseudo-route, Lullaby of an open heart : A Saki pseudo-route & Sakura Blossom : A way with Hisao

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