Yamaku Book Club (20201116 LOL Quartet)

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)

Post by woohootouhou » Sat Sep 26, 2020 10:50 pm

Pretty great descriptions as a whole. Honestly, I think that this is about as good as a story could be when you have so little information about the finished characters. Obviously Lilly didn't end up being quite so filthy rich, but it's still something I could totally see her doing.

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)

Post by TheHivemind » Sat Oct 03, 2020 6:23 pm

Hacksorus wrote:
Sun Sep 13, 2020 1:42 am
I.. uh.. was in elementary school when this one was written.. oh boy..
I was in my third year of college.

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)

Post by NuclearStudent » Sun Oct 04, 2020 10:18 pm

TheHivemind wrote:
Sat Oct 03, 2020 6:23 pm
Hacksorus wrote:
Sun Sep 13, 2020 1:42 am
I.. uh.. was in elementary school when this one was written.. oh boy..
I was in my third year of college.

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)

Post by Hacksorus » Sat Oct 17, 2020 8:48 pm

TheHivemind wrote:
Sat Oct 03, 2020 6:23 pm
Hacksorus wrote:
Sun Sep 13, 2020 1:42 am
I.. uh.. was in elementary school when this one was written.. oh boy..
I was in my third year of college.

If anyone needs me I'll be over in the corner crumbling into a skeleton like the dude who drank from the wrong goblet in Last Crusade.
If it makes any difference, I read KS in my early teens and it was a huge positive influence on that stage of my life, with yours being one of my favorite routes. :D

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (Just Live)

Post by Oddball » Sun Nov 01, 2020 4:47 pm

Okay. I skipped out on October because I was busy doing my Halloween things elsewhere.

I apologize.

If I do it again, feel free to yell at me.

Now let's move on.

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Let's move on to ME!

Come on, you know I can't resist spotlighting myself every once in a while. (Plus that's what came up when I drew stories out of the hat, so to speak.) Now here's a short little number with Saki and Hisao.

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201107 Just Live)

Post by brythain » Sun Nov 01, 2020 9:31 pm

I like the casual sleepy post-coital vibe with the deep philosophical reflection embedded in it, coupled with some true romantic dilemmas of the kind you get when you date a dying girl.
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200907 Another Omake Scene)

Post by Mirage_GSM » Sun Nov 15, 2020 7:14 pm

Oddball wrote:
Fri Sep 11, 2020 12:09 pm
A little too flowery for me, and I wasn't aware of the super-rich Lilly era, but there were elements that were cute enough to still make it an enjoyable read.
Considering what we know of Lilly know, the idea that at one time they considered making Lilly half African and her family owned a diamond mine is just way over the top. I'm really glad to see that gone toned down.
Since I don't think Penguinmayhem was ever part of the dev team I really doubt that was really considered at any point in time...
In fact even if he were part of the dev team that wouldn't mean his fanfic was ever planned to be a part of the canon *cough* Pedagogy *cough*

As for the current story, I particularly like those lines:
“You really want me to dump you if I get a better chance?” I ask.
“Yes. I want that. But don't actually do it, because then I'll hate you,”
Personally I don't believe in reincarnation, but I'm honestly unsure what would be better for Saki - that reincarnation exists and she's have a chance at another goaround or that it doesn't and she wasn't some vile criminal in her past life...
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201107 old silly stuff)

Post by Oddball » Mon Nov 16, 2020 10:21 pm

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We're going to look at a bunch of old silliness this time around! Old stuff is always fun. Sometimes.

Let's start strong with some by one of the devs.
lawl by Anonymous22.
This starts out as an actual serious erotic scene, and manages to do a really nice job of it, before turning into ... something else.

"That's totally Cheating"~A Bizzare Nightmare by Rydux.
This is one of those dream stories. If you don't like dream stories, you probably won't like this. It's about Hisao dreaming his game of Risk is for real... and Shizune is cheating.

Attack of Drunk Hanako by Roxius.
There's a few good moments here and there, but for the most part it's a bit too "LOL so random" for my taste. It's certainly better than the other story by this guy we're going to look at though.

and last but least...

A short Anti-Hanako fic (Although I do love her) by Roxius. This story is short, horrible, was apparently written because the author was mad at Crud and has no real reason to exist. This is the kind of story that makes you want to slap the author's mother.
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201116 LOL Quartet)

Post by woohootouhou » Wed Nov 18, 2020 11:15 am

The first two are the good type of random. The third is the bad. lawl is pretty hilarious just because of how smoothly the transition is, and "That's totally cheating" is a fun gundam crossover, even if not quite as good as lawl. Attack of Drunk Hanako is completely just LOL so random, and doesn't really have anything going for it outside of that. And since LOL so random isn't actually that funny, especially in overdoses, the story isn't very good.

The fourth story is the kind of thing I'd write in an online game about somebody's character before ctrl A + deleting it all. Definitely deserves a hearty slap.

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201116 LOL Quartet)

Post by ProfAllister » Thu Nov 19, 2020 3:53 pm

This feels like a 4-part lecture in how to do "lolrandom" right.

"lawl", written by the inimitable A22, has a general silliness, but remains consistent in thematic imagery and more closely resembles an overly tortured metaphor.

"That's Totally Cheating" is a slight step down, going for a somewhat grounded scene before bringing in some silliness, but the silliness remains both controlled and grounded.

"Attack of Drunk Hanako" manages to at least retain some degree of causality and plot. That being said, the characters bear little to no resemblance to the individuals of the same name from the actual VN.

"A short Anti-Hanako fic" is somehow both more effort and less quality than your standard rage comic. Frankly, in my opinion, if you're gonna go the route of "I made her drink gasoline", I expect you to do the research to learn exactly how horrific the experience would be, as opposed to "and then she 'sploded".
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201116 LOL Quartet)

Post by Mirage_GSM » Fri Nov 20, 2020 1:13 pm

What does it say about the other three stories, that A22's is the most normal one?

The first one is at least readable; the other three... not so much.
Emi > Misha > Hanako > Lilly > Rin > Shizune

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20201116 LOL Quartet)

Post by Razoredge » Fri Nov 20, 2020 1:26 pm

I have to say, in my humble opinion, the last one is the worst. Well, we all know it was supposed to work on the shock factory... But, at least, try to do something realistic... It even DOESN'T work like that. I'm ok with the shocking value, but at least, it needs to be kinda realistic....
Lilly = Akira > Miki = Hanako > Emi > Rin > Shizune

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