Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (Updated 12/8)
'you're'“Your probably right,” Saki admits, even though she pouts again when she does so.
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'you're'“Your probably right,” Saki admits, even though she pouts again when she does so.
That had to be one of my favorite lines in this chapter. As for the chapter even if it was a bit shorter than normal (I barely noticed, make of that what you will) it worked both as a show of what's coming up, how things have progressed off screen since the end of Act 3, and what hasn't really progressed since then, such as Hisao acknowledging here they've still skirted around what happens next or the fact Maeda is still an ass. And it works well.“You’re amazing - and I love you - but I’m pretty sure you don’t have any superpowers.”
So far what I would say is the best depiction to be found on these forums is in "Sisterhood", though iIrc it takes a bit of artistic license since it assumes there'll be an exception that allows Yamaku students to take the exams AT Yamaku.Most of it involved running into a few walls while doing research, especially regarding what third-year students go through nearing graduation.
Should be basically right. The only thing I noticed is that I think the really prestigious universities don't rely on the national test at all and have JUST their own - and more demanding - tests.I think I got all of that right - if anyone with experience with Japanese high schools can point out any major errors with this, please do!
Hah, I know. It just felt strange because I normally put out chapters that are longer, and by the time I had done everything I wanted to in this one as basically a "catch up and set up" chapter, it was only about 3k words long. So I did some research to expand out the chapter and hopefully it flows better. With 187k words right now, I'm probably going to end up around 250-275k when all is said and done.Mirage_GSM wrote: ↑Sun Dec 09, 2018 8:51 am Finally whether a chapter is too long or too short should never be measured by its wordcount.
I was unsure of how long to make the timeskip, but this would put it around late November/early December. I want LtF to continue to graduation and possibly a bit there-after, but there was no way I could write another three months of content when none of it would really progress the plot beyond what's here. Saki and Hisao are slightly different a few months later on and settled into their relationship, which is something I really liked about Shizune's route.Blackmambauk wrote: ↑Sat Dec 08, 2018 11:41 am Was surprised at how much of a time skip you did for the story. 3 months is a long time and to go from end of summer to winter time was a bit jarring at first to read. But i got used to it quickly enough due to the fact we saw throughout chapter 3 of Hisao and Saki's relationship developing and of what we saw with the music sessions and so on. Plus, Shizune's route time skipped all the time and that's my favorite of the game.
It's broken because the shimmie is dead.RicartElit wrote: ↑Tue Jan 29, 2019 1:08 am I haven’t finished reading what is written of the story, but I wanted to warn you (in case you didn’t know. If you do then I am sorry) that the image during the first time Hisao and Saki kiss, at the end of Act 2 is broken. Nothing to report except that. Been enjoying everything otherwise.
Wooo! New chapter and the first one of 2019 (two months into it )
It took longer than I hoped it would (as always) but I was able to get it done before vacation next week. This was a really fun chapter to write!
The title of this chapter comes from the song "Pompeii" by Bastille.
Comments and feedback appreciated as always!
Act 4: Liftoff
Scene 2: Pompeii
Chisato raises her cup of tea. “What are we drinking to?”
“Finishing up that project,” I instantly answer, causing Saki to laugh.
“What, you didn’t enjoy being stuck with the dynamic duo again?” she asks.
“Once was enough, thank you. Your turn.”
“I’m damned proud I finally learned that violin trick,” she beams, with more than a bit of pride. “I’m really excited to record next week. Mitsuru?”
“I’m looking forward to winter break coming up soon, if that counts.”
Chisato pouts at her boyfriend. “Oh come on, that sounds so cliché. Pick something else.”
“You might get mad at me.”
“After saying that, I will be if you don’t spit it out.”
Mitsuru smiles. “Alright. I’m feeling pretty confident about the exams.”
The rest of us groan at that word, with Chisato glaring angrily. Mitsuru simply looks at her with a bemused expression that tells her she knew what she was getting into. In response, she shakes her head and raises her cup higher, causing the rest of us to do the same.
It’s a rather cold afternoon, but not too bad. We haven’t haven’t had any snow yet, but with the sharp bite to the air, that might change the next time the clouds roll in. Fortunately, it’s not so bad we need anything other than our blazers, and even then it’s warm enough in the Shanghai to where we can take them off.
“Why’d you have to bring that up?” Chisato asks.
“You asked for it. Besides, the first answer I gave was genuine."
“Why’s that?” I ask.
“Because one way or another, exams will be over. So no matter what, there’s nothing we’ll be able to do but enjoy ourselves on Christmas Eve.”
Saki sets her coffee down and smiles. “You really do sound confident.”
“I’m with him on this one,” I say. Mitsuru raises his cup to me in salute.
I’m further rewarded by Saki giving me an elbow in the ribs. “Easy for you to say. We’ll have the recording the next day.”
“Even better,” he continues. “You two get to relax for a day and take the pressure off. It’s perfect.”
“If I had an hour I couldn’t list all the reasons that sentence was wrong.”
Chisato laughs at her friend. “He could be right. We just need to make it a somewhat early night.”
“Do we know what teachers are coming this year?”
“They haven’t said anything official yet, but Mutou said he might. Nurse came the last two years, so he’s probably doing it this year too. Mrs. Miyagi and her husband for sure.”
“What about Mrs. Sakamoto?” I ask.
Saki shakes her head. “Sensei wants to spend the night with her husband, and we’re all getting together the next day anyway.”
“I know Miki and Suzu wanted to hang out together. Do you think they had anything in mind?”
“You’re in the same class if you want to ask them.”
I’m about to answer when the buzzing of a cellphone cuts me off.
“Hold on, that’s me,” Mitsuru says, reaching into his pocket and pulling out his phone. He checks the display before frowning. “Looks like I have an email.”
“You never told me you could get email on your phone,” his girlfriend teases.
“That’s because you’ve never sent me one before,” he replies, flipping it open and pushing a few buttons. “You always text me or talk to me in person when you have something to tell me.”
“Maybe I’ll have to start forwarding some of the stuff I find to you,” Chisato starts, but her brow furrows in concern when she senses Mitsuru’s mood change. All of us notice the subtle shift as his eyes stare intently at the screen and his body tenses up. “Mitsuru?”
“Give me a minute,” he says, covering his mouth with his hand in a show of intense concentration. Whatever it is that just came up on that screen, it has his full attention.
All of us wait a few seconds as we try not to make it too obvious that we’re staring at him. Finally, after hitting a few more buttons to scroll through whatever the message is, his face adopts a stunned look.
“Everything okay…?”
“Yeah,” he says, closing his phone and setting it on the table. He takes a moment to take off his glasses and rub his forehead. “It was from Yonsei University.”
Chisato’s eyes go wide. “What did it say?”
“They’re going to let me take their entrance exam,” he says, his voice quiet with astonishment. “I mean, I know I applied for both of them, but…”
“That’s great news, isn’t it?” Saki asks.
Mitsuru’s nodding. “It is. It wasn’t my first choice of school, but they’re the first one I’ve heard back from,” he exhales.
“Are you going to go for it?”
He nods again, then lifts his eyes to look at us all. “It was the reason I went to Korea during summer break, after all. I just...didn’t think I’d get a response.”
Chisato slaps her boyfriend on the back before affectionately draping her arm around his shoulders. “I’m proud of you.”
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