This is a challenge for me to write convincingly, seems I'm still not quite there yet I tried to convey that Hisao seems to forget about his different concerns when he's with Saki, as she is pretty much the one who is setting the pace of their relationship...for now at any rate. He has time to muse on it when he's alone, but since he doesn't have much experience, all he's going off of is a "gut feeling" that something isn't quite right. It's not a steady movement forward, but instead a rather jerky, unsmooth motion. The same thing happens in Hanako's route.TubaMirum wrote:Still, things seem like they're progressing a bit nicely, though I didn't get too much of the half-despair Hisao was experiencing over their uncomfortable relationship status. It feels like everything is just fine and dandy after the lunch and getting his face bashed in, but that doesn't entirely make sense to me considering they're still standing in the same place. I can believe Hisao managed to forget all about it in the excitement, but I doubt that''ll be able to continue for long.
Any ideas on how I can write that feeling a bit better? It won't progress too much farther like this, but it will come up in a few plot points later.
You know, I thought really hard about Saki kissing him there, but I realized that in the VN itself, there's very few actual displays of public affection shown except during the sex scenes, or moments when the characters are alone. I could be wrong, but aren't Rin and Lilly the only ones that have a kiss outside of a sex scene?
While I really don't think that's realistic for people of high school age (oh to be young again) it seems to feel that way for the students at Yamaku...of course, then you have people sneaking off to the track shed for some extracurricular activities...