OC "Neko" - Route [reconsidered]

[NekoDude]

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[NekoDude]

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[Mirage_GSM]

You know, Kenji doesn't own a phone. He's afraid of them

[NekoDude]

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[NekoDude]

You know, Kenji doesn't own a phone. He's afraid of them

It's a landline for his room then. Doesn't change anything except it explains why they can't text.

[NekoDude]

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[Mirage_GSM]

She attempts to form a square in the air with her hands...

"hand". She only has one.

[bhtooefr]

She forgets that at times, and that's how I interpreted the sentence - that she tried to use both hands, and forgot that she only has one.

Then again, it's Hisao POV, so it doesn't quite have the same impact...

[NekoDude]

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[Mirage_GSM]

...in order for this to be a "route" and not just a story, I feel it has to have at least a good and bad end, and a way to distinguish between the two.

That solely depends on your definition of "route"
Strictly speaking nothing that is posted in this forum is a "route", since it is all fanfiction not a VN.
In the context of the archive we consider every story that tells the story of a romantic relationship from beginning to end a "route" regardless of choice points, so please don't feel obligated to add any.

What I absolutely WON'T do is insert decision points without pursuing all options.

I really hope you keep it to a minimum of choices then (preferably zero). The scripts of KS are a nightmare to read, and I imagine it would only be worse on the forums^^°