Summer By The Sea [A sorta-sequel to Weekend at Hisao's]

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Summer By The Sea [A sorta-sequel to Weekend at Hisao's]

Post by themocaw » Wed Aug 21, 2013 6:43 am

Part 1 is here
Part 2 is here: http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t ... 70#p182070
Part 3 is here: http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t ... 45#p182070
Part 4 is here: http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t ... 25#p184325

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P.S. - Please wear panties.

Hisao's never going to let me live that down, is he?

All right, I do have to admit, jumping his bones the moment I'd gotten off the train last year wasn't exactly the most ladylike thing I could have done. But circumstances were different then, and besides, I had a good excuse.

The excuse being: I hadn't seen my boyfriend in three months, and I needed to get laid something terrible.

Things are different this time. For one thing, I haven't seen my fiancee in four months this time. At least, not in person. Over the internet, sure. And you can get a lot done with a couple of webcams and a good internet connection.

Of course, there are a bunch of things you can't get done over the internet. Like the way that he does this thing with his hands and his mouth and his. . .

His. . .

Down, girl. He's bringing his parents with him. And despite the things that happened that time you went to visit his house for a weekend, I don't think my fiance's parents would appreciate it if I dragged their son behind the nearest bush for a quickie right in front of them.

Well, maybe his Dad would find it funny. His Mom. . . probably not so much.

. . .

Okay. So maybe that postscript after his most recent email is pertinent after all.

Time to do one last check before they arrive.

House? In order. Rooms? Clean. Linens? Laundered. Beds? Made. Pantry? Stocked. Closet? Well stocked. Protection? Left nightstand, top drawer.

Little Brother? Doing something in the garden. I'm not sure what. He's a strange young boy, Hideaki is. His most recent "thing" seems to be "cool hats." Not that there's anything wrong with hats, but when people think of cool hats, they're usually not thinking big white sun bonnets with baby blue hatbands. Gave my father an ulcer. At least, that's what Hideaki claims he said.

Speaking of which. Irritating father? Being as obnoxious as usual. Pacing back and forth in the living room as I come down the stairs, grumbling something to himself. Probably accusing my fiance of sniffing glue or cooking meth or something like that. I'm not exactly sure. He's facing out the sliding glass doors.

Whatever he's grumbling about, though, it's apparently got him really annoyed.

Well, I've got no sympathy. This was his idea, after all. All I wanted was permission to use the summer house so that Hisao and I could spent some time over the summer vacation together. My plans involved no families, just me and my lovely, sexy, socially awkward and slightly mopey fiancee having wild sex in every single room of this house.

Of course, my father wasn't having any of that. . .

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Annoying Father: "Why do you want to use the summer house? So you can have wild sex in every single room with that glue-sniffing disgrace?"

Me: "Yes." (Hey, there was no point in lying to him.)

Irritating Father: "Disgraceful. No good will come of this. That boy is a complete wimp. Engaged to you for almost a year now, and he still hasn't set a date for the wedding? Useless."

Me: "We're waiting until graduation to get married."

Completely Annoying Twit of a Man Who Somehow Spawned Me: "The excuse of the pathetic. He's probably trying to draw this out so he can leech off of you for as long as possible. His kind always do. He'll bleed you dry, take what he wants, then dump you by the side of the road."

Me: "That's not true." (Great response there, Shizune. Way to stand up for your fiance. The samurai women of old would have been proud.)

Fucking Annoying Father Who Should Shut His Mouth Before I Break His Teeth: "Well, if he's so serious about you, then why hasn't he introduced his parents to me? I mean, if you two are seriously going to marry, then shouldn't I meet the people who are going to be helping to take care of my little girl? Cowardice. Complete Cowardice."

Me, the Brilliant One: "Well, maybe I'll invite them to come along to the summer home, then!"

Seriously Fucking Asshole of a Father Who Maneuvered Me into Saying Something Dumb: "Good idea. Let's make it a get-together for both families. Hideaki and I will join you and that useless drug addict and his family as well. Perhaps our presence will help mitigate your planned debauchery."

Me: (Sudden realization that I've just been played.)

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And that's why I had to text my fiancee about a month ago and tell him that our romantic weekend was turning into a family vacation comedy movie.

Any last hopes of salvaging the week were destroyed when Hisao's parents decided that a shared weekend by the beach for the two families was "a great idea," despite his best attempts at explaining my father to them.

Meanwhile, my father seems to have completely forgotten that this entire thing was his idea. Hideaki tells me he's done nothing but grumble the entire time we've been here. Not the first time I've considered my deafness a blessing: he has to listen to that nonsense. I just need to turn away.

Deep breaths, Shizune. Deep breaths.

I feel my brother's movements before I see him: his footsteps reverberating through the floorboards as he jogs down the stairs. He catches my eye as he jogs past and gestures vaguely towards the front door.

I guess they must have arrived.

A quick glance out the window confirms it: a large yellow taxi cab has pulled up the driveway.

I take a deep breath and close my eyes.

This is going to be the worst vacation ever. I can just feel it.

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Author's note: I have no idea why my version of Shizune's inner voice sounds kinda like JD from Scrubs.

Like Weekend at Hisao's there may be porn, but if so, I'll keep it off the main thread.
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Re: Summer By The Sea [A sorta-sequel to Weekend at Hisao's]

Post by Shail » Wed Aug 21, 2013 7:37 am

themocaw wrote:P.S. - Please wear panties

Lol'd so hard because I can really see Shizune in that situation. Good story so far, I shall stalk this thread o3o
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Post by YourFavAnon » Wed Aug 21, 2013 8:25 am

Mocaw, you magnificent bastard. This is going to be great, already getting that vibe.
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Re: Summer By The Sea [A sorta-sequel to Weekend at Hisao's]

Post by AntonSlavik020 » Wed Aug 21, 2013 1:44 pm

Love the fact that it's from Shizune's perspective. She's one of my favorite girls, but since she's not well liked overall, not many people do a story from her perspective. Also loved "Weekend at Hisao's", so this being a sequel to that is a bonus. Can't wait till the parents meet.
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Re: Summer By The Sea [A sorta-sequel to Weekend at Hisao's]

Post by Mirage_GSM » Wed Aug 21, 2013 1:46 pm

Hey, themocaw is back!
This is your first new story since... Oh, I remember you did a short one back in April, didn't you?
And you're going back to your roots with this one ;-)

Anyway, welcome back!

Did Jigoro learn to sign somewhen in the meantime, or is that conversation held with pen and paper?
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Re: Summer By The Sea [A sorta-sequel to Weekend at Hisao's]

Post by Shail » Wed Aug 21, 2013 1:58 pm

o-o Good question, I assumed he learned to sign, to talk to his daughter, but never really questioned it.
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Post by Hoitash » Wed Aug 21, 2013 4:20 pm

...So, Shizune learned her manipulation skills from her father...

Yeah, that makes sense. This shall be a most interesting read :).
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Post by Minion of Chaos » Wed Aug 21, 2013 5:08 pm

I liked Weekend, so this'll be good
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Post by Mahorfeus » Wed Aug 21, 2013 5:59 pm

Well, this was unexpected. But I'll take all the unexpected surprises that I can get. :P
Mirage_GSM wrote:Did Jigoro learn to sign somewhen in the meantime, or is that conversation held with pen and paper?
I know this takes place before the wedding, but he used it during the reception IIRC. I'm curious about when exactly he learned it as well.

(It's been forever since I read that fic.)
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Post by AntonSlavik020 » Wed Aug 21, 2013 7:32 pm

So by calling her fiance' I assume you mean via skype or something? Because an actual phone call wouldn't do either of them any good.
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Post by ProfAllister » Wed Aug 21, 2013 9:20 pm

Well, there are many things that I could criticise about your character interpretations, but I'll leave that by the wayside for now, especially considering your interpretations are far more mainstream than mine.

Writing from the perspective of the girls is all well and good, and it's expected that there will be a lot of stretches with interpretation and so on. But it gets a little jarring (to knowledgable individuals) when factual errors come in (hence why I was constantly harping on the depiction of Narcolepsy in Scissorlips's PseuPseuSu route). While it's true that Shizune has more or less "opted out" of the deaf community, it would still be worthwhile to study aspects of deaf culture to keep things from being too jarring.

What brings this up in particular? The exact same word that came up when I was discussing Goldilurks's "From Shizune's Perspective" with a deafie. As a general rule, deaf people simply don't refer to their deafness as a "condition." For many, it's very much an aspect of their identity. While it is conceivable that Shizune would think this way, it would likely imply a sense of significant shame about her deafness. It's possible, but that word choice has some pretty significant baggage associated with it.

Anyway, nice to see you writing again. Looking forward to seeing how this develops.
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Re: Summer By The Sea [A sorta-sequel to Weekend at Hisao's]

Post by 13loop » Wed Aug 21, 2013 10:18 pm

Ahh just as I check the forums in days, you make your comeback mocaw :) I'm stocked to see what happens in this happy-comedy!

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Post by dewelar » Wed Aug 21, 2013 10:46 pm

Definitely going to be keeping an eye on this. WaH is a favorite of mine, and I'm always up for a good farce :) .
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Post by Steinherz » Wed Aug 21, 2013 11:03 pm

The string of Shizune's internal insults to Jigoro are golden.
Will they be a recurring thing? Also, is this going to be entirely from Shizune's perspective or will it switch up?
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Post by Mirage_GSM » Thu Aug 22, 2013 2:28 am

While it is conceivable that Shizune would think this way, it would likely imply a sense of significant shame about her deafness.
I don't really see why this should be.
Most KS characters think of their disability as some sort of "condition", and with the exception of Hisao and Hanako they are not ashamed of it.
I don't see why deafness should be different.
It may be that there are a lot of deaf people who do think so, but Shizune has never been known to mince words.
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