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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by Mahorfeus » Fri Jul 26, 2013 4:55 am

Another excellent one that somehow slipped under my radar. Or maybe I'm just going blind.
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by Umber » Fri Jul 26, 2013 11:55 am

Mahorfeus wrote:Another excellent one that somehow slipped under my radar. Or maybe I'm just going blind.
Hey, thanks. (Oh gosh, expectations. Argh. [/internalweeping])

And while I'm at it, chapter two will be posted soon. I have to do something productive over my summer, after all.
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by Steinherz » Fri Jul 26, 2013 2:39 pm

Umber wrote:
Mahorfeus wrote:Another excellent one that somehow slipped under my radar. Or maybe I'm just going blind.
Hey, thanks. (Oh gosh, expectations. Argh. [/internalweeping])

And while I'm at it, chapter two will be posted soon. I have to do something productive over my summer, after all.
*knows that feel*
I've been waiting patiently for Chapter 2 for quite some time :lol:
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by forgetmenot » Fri Jul 26, 2013 3:59 pm

Steinherz wrote:
Umber wrote:
Mahorfeus wrote:Another excellent one that somehow slipped under my radar. Or maybe I'm just going blind.
Hey, thanks. (Oh gosh, expectations. Argh. [/internalweeping])

And while I'm at it, chapter two will be posted soon. I have to do something productive over my summer, after all.
*knows that feel*
I've been waiting patiently for Chapter 2 for quite some time :lol:
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by RedRover » Thu Aug 01, 2013 1:34 am

Not sure how I didn't see this, but I'm glad I did, albeit a little late. Eagerly awaiting more. :)
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by Jestarr » Sat Sep 07, 2013 12:15 pm

Awesome start, very much looking forward to the second chapter when you finally decide to grace us with its presence :P

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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by Umber » Sat Sep 07, 2013 10:04 pm

Jestarr wrote:Awesome start, very much looking forward to the second chapter when you finally decide to grace us with its presence
The second chapter's finished, but there's some revisions being done (as recommended by my loving editor) so that it'll be better than it should be. Hopefully, I think. Continual improvement.

Despite the recent time restraints (a fancy term for not making the time for work), I'm glad that I can still manage to turn the scraps of my daily schedule's havoc into productivity. Scheduled posts are probably beyond all reach, but I've a mind to compensate for that in more ways than one. Mostly by working hard, since I can't really work more. :p
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by motokid108 » Mon Sep 09, 2013 2:56 am

I eagerly await the continuation. This forum could use some more Natsume. I debate writing a route myself.
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 2, 10/??]

Post by Umber » Fri Oct 18, 2013 12:23 am

After four, five months-ish of undeclared hiatus, Disheveled will be back on track within a week, or an approximation of some similar length. College applications and senior-related high school projects haven't necessarily been getting in the way of progress, but they sure were the biggest factors as to why such progress has been so slow. That, and my own irresponsibility of not taking care of those ahead of time.

Adolescent life really gets to you.

Aaaargh.

But in any case, an update's due relatively soon. And hopefully my application to Purdue. Ciao!

Edit: Three weeks delay from unexpected senior projects, as well as numerous personal events. I apologize (again) for having a terrible, if not non-existent, schedule.

I want this to update as much as you guys do.
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 2, 10/??]

Post by AntonSlavik020 » Fri Oct 18, 2013 12:56 am

Good to see this is getting an update. I loved the first chapter, and Natsume and Naomi don't appear in enough stories.
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 2, 10/??]

Post by TacticalBacon » Fri Oct 18, 2013 1:33 am

Umber wrote:After four, five months-ish of undeclared hiatus, Disheveled will be back on track within a week, or an approximation of some similar length. College applications and senior-related high school projects haven't necessarily been getting in the way of progress, but they sure were the biggest factors as to why such progress has been so slow. That, and my own irresponsibility of not taking care of those ahead of time.

Adolescent life really gets to you.

Aaaargh.

But in any case, an update's due relatively soon. And hopefully my application to Purdue. Ciao!
Looking forward to it :)
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 2, 10/??]

Post by motokid108 » Sat Oct 19, 2013 12:40 am

Bring forth the one named Natsume!
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 2, 11/??]

Post by Lianam » Fri Nov 08, 2013 6:28 pm

I must say; this was very good, I'd like to see more. :mrgreen:
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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 2, 11/??]

Post by Kyler Thatch » Fri Nov 08, 2013 8:21 pm

I liked the banter between Akio and Natsume (and Naomi). He's a fun character.

Mutou felt awkward, though. Not the usual Mutou-awkward, more of a "this is not my mental image of him" awkward. But that might just be me.

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Re: Disheveled [Ch. 1, 6/6]

Post by Munchenhausen » Sun Dec 22, 2013 10:41 am

I don't know what this story makes me feel, but I feel it.
It's a pleasant feel to eat pasties to, at least.
The indecision she feels towards Naomi is quite relatable for some reason, and I can't wait to see of she does go for it!
Love your depiction of them both, mate! Keep it up! :D
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