NekoDude wrote:I've never considered this an exceptionally difficult piece, having performed it with multiple ensembles, in multiple arrangements (and keys: G, A-flat, and A), from almost as many different instruments (why G? Drum and bugle corps, back in the days when we only had two valves and the entire hornline had to be in G... yeah I'm old). It's fast, and technical at times, but it's tonal and logical, and somehow that makes it quite a bit easier to play. A-flat has to be the worst key for it -- even for a wind ensemble full of flat-key instruments, it would have been kinder to just have left it in A.
Try getting a whole violin section of teenagers to play some of the sixteenth-note scale-esque stuff together
and in time
and then come back to me and say it's not difficult. I seriously came close to loathing those sectionals I had to lead with my stand partner.
NekoDude wrote:Also, is she playing it in the modern tradition (D) or the original written key (E-flat, with the solo violin tuned up a half step)? If the latter, I hope her well-worn road violin doesn't just implode with the extra string tension... I can just imagine her getting a little bit too emotional with the pizzicato, and there's a sickening *CRACK* heard just before violin and violinist collapse into a singularity.
A = 440Hz, fuck what ya herd
But seriously fuck that detuned shit, I played a baroque concert once and it seriously messed with my perfect pitch. I was practically nosebleeding the whole time.
I briefly glade back at the clock.
Glance, perhaps? Glade is a forest clearing.
Helbereth wrote:The only thing I don't quite fully understand is why Rin didn't recognize her, though I suspect her ignorance is intentional more than a result of absentmindedness. The potential alcoholism doesn't surprise me, which is perhaps a sad thought, but that doesn't make it any less realistic.
It's funny that you read it this way, because I thought I made it clear Rin knew exactly who she was, but because of the way the conversation was set up ("Don't I know you from somewhere?" "I doubt you
.") the meaning of what Rin says ("I recognize you as the girl who doesn't remember anything and therefore could have no clue as to who I am") is lost in semantics. It is, granted, a conversational nuance that's easily glossed over, I guess. Maybe I should go back and add some italics there.
Helbereth wrote:I wish I could forget some things like that...
Don't we all.
Helbereth wrote:I'll finish by pointing out that epilogues like this, which show things having fallen apart anyway, have been written based on even the good endings from the VN - I've written one myself. Don't drink the haterade.
Eh, I wasn't too concerned about it. It does a couple things (such as let the readers have a peek into Kagami's thought processes, or signifying that there's a very real chance of a bad end) that I feel are necessary at this point in the "pseudocanon", and it let me get away from the story flowchart for a bit. It's reassuring that not everyone
hates it, though.
That was really well-written, well-put together, well-enjoyed and all kinds of other wells. I might like it better than the most recent chapter update. But boy, was it depressing.
It's almost unfortunate that I, as a writer, seem consigned to exist outside of the emotional spectrum of my work. When I was writing this, I had a gleeful smile on my face because I'm a sadistic bastard and a horrible human being, but that's neither here nor there.
I guess I've always considered art to have fulfilled its purpose when it makes you feel something
. For the longest time I hated the writing of Tennessee Williams, but I realized a few years out of high school that The Glass Menagerie
is one of the greatest works of art I've ever read, simply because he somehow made me despise every character in that play more than I despised anyone in real life
. At least at the time. My point being is that I guess I would have considered this oneshot a failure if it didn't elicit some sort of reaction in a reader, rather than simply being disliked.
And whether or not you enjoyed it, you all have my sincere gratitude for reading. I hope it doesn't put you off the rest of the story.