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Forget it.
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Forget it.
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That was...
Word's can't explain how well-written this is.
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Oh dear. I don't want to hate you, dude. At least that content warning hasn't come into effect yet. But it's a sombre warning for chapters to come. Oh dear.
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doomish wrote:Len Mao
Vladimir Zedong.(get it?)
A well written story and an interesting plot, I wonder what hisao would think if hanako dissaperd after a fight.
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This will either be horrible or incredible. Possibly both. The forum drama alone should be worth the effort.
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Comrade wrote: A well written story and an interesting plot, I wonder what hisao would think if hanako dissaperd after a fight.
We're probably going to find out! :wink:

Thank you all for your comments so far, no matter how uncertain they may be. I'm looking forward to this as much as the rest of you, after all.
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I'm pretty afraid to follow this. Hopefully it won't end horribly and leave me deppressed for a week.

On another note their is no being more contemptable than a Human trafficker. Need money? How about you and your girlfriend get beaten to death by a sackful of quarters. It's going to be far faster and more merciful than what happens to your victims.
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Um, uh.. Interesting.

I'm looking forward for more. I hope this doesn't ends badly and
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damn it, this last chapter almost made me physically ill! can't say that I like that feeling but I just can't stop reading...
that bar douche bag has some serious bullshit going on in his head..
awesome story looking forward to the next chapter!
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Forget it.
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Nopenopenopenopenopenopenope.

>Lolita

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I will MURDER YOU WHERE YOU SLEEP, DOOMISH. Don't think I won't find it. I know where every single person on the internet lives, and I've got the power of Bowser, Ganon, AND Dracula on my side! :twisted:
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Any specific reason for the chapter 3 rewrite? (I read the original on pastebin)
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JTC545 wrote:Any specific reason for the chapter 3 rewrite? (I read the original on pastebin)
I felt like changing the plot's progression to be a little bit slower-paced. Instead of jumping right in, I had Len Mao stick to his word from Chapter 2 and start Hanako off small. It's changed on Pastebin now too.
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