Rin (A Poem)

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Kielox
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Rin (A Poem)

Post by Kielox » Sun Jun 10, 2012 4:56 pm

[I just finished Rin's path and I have to say I was completely blown away, it was too good! I wrote this poem in one go, in an effort that felt more like a stream of consciousness flow, and I am really happy with the way it turned out. It is meant to be read without pauses, or with as few pauses as possible, and so I have removed most of the punctuation, I think Rin wouldn't mind. Obviously, if you haven't completed Rin's path there may be some spoilers, although they are not explicit as such. Enjoy!]


Rin

I sigh, she sighs with me as well
In unison for once we do
There is a space between us two
A space no bridge can guide me through.
“You love your world, I love it too
But fail to see it as you do”
I try to reach her through the void
And loving her is hard to bear
But love I do and I do swear
That holding on and letting go
Seem the same thing through it all.
Past and future all is one
When the present is at hand
I fly I fall without a thought
She paints to help me see her soul
I talk to make her see my “self”
And yet we fail we often stall
It feels like snow on summer’s knoll
Confusing startling yet alluring

I sigh, she sighs with me as well
In unison for once we do
The space between us is our world
A world in which her “I” is mine.
She loves this world, I love it too
And everything’s all right…and true.
King of a hundred horsemen.

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Re: Rin (A Poem)

Post by # 2 » Mon Jun 11, 2012 12:21 am

It feels right.

Well, any spoilers you included seem vague enough. Then again, I feel that if you visit the fan fiction forums before you've completed all the paths, you are just asking to be spoiled. ;)
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Re: Rin (A Poem)

Post by Kielox » Mon Jun 11, 2012 6:12 pm

"It feels right" is exactly the reaction that I was looking for so I am satisfied! Thanks! :)
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