*notarizes this*dewelar wrote:I don't want to step on Leaty's toes here, but since I did sign off on this scene, I would say that Our Takako is quite conflicted in this scene. She wants to say something, but she doesn't know Iwanako (yet?).Mirage_GSM wrote:Count me among those... Even after you telling us, her reaction still puzzles me a bit…
It just makes me so happy that, especially in comparison to the days before I began this fic, people are starting to go "Right, I know what Iwanako's unique character traits are." People care about her now.dewelar wrote:Also echoing Mirage to a degree...when Iwanako talks, it's never boring. She's capital-I Interesting to read, even when she perhaps shouldn't be.
(I know you said to ignore this, but I already wrote a thing.)dewelar wrote:Overall, I have a hard time wrapping my head around Molly in general. As a character, she always strikes me as somewhat ephemeral, no matter how many stories I read that feature her. I suppose that's why you also added Taka-Taka, beyond just her connection to Emi, yes? If so, well played .
I don't blame anyone for missing this detail, because at this point it's super-obscure, but as we saw in Not So Cute, Molly and Emi are not on a given-name basis. The person in that scene who said "Oh my god. I'll get [Nurse], Emi" was actually Miki. (Yes; Lilly, Emi, Iwanako, Molly, and Miki all arrived at the same point in the hallway at approximately the same time. It was a clown car moment.)
I'd love to write it! She's on the short list of fanfiction characters I'd like to meaningfully incorporate somehow, along with Naoko from TD and Kagami. They're all characters I'd really like the chance to play around with at some point (along with some/most of Suriko's characters, particularly Blind Aoi, who I'm kind of in love with) if I manage to come up with the right arc.dewelar wrote:Seriously, though, I would love to see [Taka-Taka and Iwanako] have a full-fledged scene at some point.
Well, yeah. Dragonflight isn't an especially good book. (I only read it in the first place so that I could RP in a Weyr with a friend, and almost immediately afterward, that RP collapsed because lady drama.)Mirage_GSM wrote:I didn't mind that single scene as much as the whole main story relying a bit too much n one giant deus ex machina^^°
I certainly hope there aren't still readers who think that she's been written out of the plot. Write her out??? And miss out on all that drama?Mirage_GSM wrote:Well, yes, but even if you don't intend to go in that direction, I'm looking forward to the resolution of their conflict. Contrite Emi is cute.
So weird, right? April's Bounty, apparently. Neither I nor Forgetful were aware of the other, so given our update speeds that's gotta be a statistical near-impossibility.Blank Mage wrote:Iwanako and Kagami on the same day, it's like CHRISTMAS!
I try to lean towards a "supportive" atmosphere without making it an "idyllic" one. I do want people to, well, give a damn, but I think kids are gonna be kids, too. Harry Potter wouldn't be as much fun if everyone was Hufflepuff, you know? (For the record, I am a Slytherin.)Blank Mage wrote:I'm not 100% sure what your version of Yamaku is like. I like to think of the Yamaku student body as being incredibly supportive and understanding in general, simply because they're all in very similar boats, many of which aren't sea-worthy or prone to drifting into rocky outcroppings. (Seeing past the imperfections is, after all, kind of the Moral of the Story.)
There was a thread on the Something Awful forums a few years ago where a blind person talked about his experiences going to a middle/high school specifically for the visually impaired, and he described it as a "a horror show beyond words." For example, the administration was incentivized to ditch their high-functioning (in terms of visual ability) students for budgetary reasons, parents were just using the school as an excuse to dump off difficult children (particularly seriously autistic blind children), there were blind kids exclusively socializing with blind kids and having no idea how to interact with the world outside that little bubble, etc. Obviously this was somewhere in Indiana, not Sendai, but I'm sure a lot of that translates.
Anyway, I've tried to take a lot of that to heart—I'm not deaf, obviously, and so as a hearing person it's easy to fall into that sort of trap of "if I were a deaf person exclusively hanging out with other deaf people, life would be amazing." I'm trying to avoid that. I want to portray Yamaku as a really, really fantastic school where there's nevertheless a lot of bored teenagers doing a lot of stupid, petty shit, because that, to me, is reality. Plus, considering how isolated the school is... In a lot of ways, the students only have each other, for better and for worse.
Plus, you have to remember that, in a lot of ways, MTtB is a deconstructive fic—part of the broader, metatextual point of this story is to illustrate how neatly and perfectly Hisao fits into his own story, and how poorly literally any other character (in this case, Iwanako) would fill his shoes, in light of that. I love Katawa Shoujo, but Hisao lives in a Hisao-shaped hole. I try to work a just a little more conflict into this fic than he encountered, without losing the charm of the VN. Hopefully that's working out.
Wandering aimlessly is pretty much just what Iwanako does, isn't it? She lacks purpose.Blank Mage wrote:I can't help but wonder who Iwanako will attend the festival with. My bet is that she'll wander aimlessly, meeting several of the characters throughout the day, rather than spend the whole day with one.
*snort*Blank Mage wrote:Also, Leaty, where is the Hanako hug?! I mean, look at the subtext! They obviously love each other, so boot up your word processor and make it happen! God, the nerve of some authors....
*nods* As I mentioned in your thread, I used to really dislike her, but nowadays I just kinda want to be her. (With longer hair.)Blank Mage wrote:It's actually why I'm writing a Shizune piece: I really sympathized with her, and in every fanfiction I read, she's lambasted by authors, portrayed as a self-centered, egotistical jerk whose only goal is to ridicule Lilly and play pointless mind-games with the rest. Which is completely accurate, but they don't have to sound so mean about it.
Blank Mage wrote:As a massive fan of FF8, this makes me unspeakably happy. (Maybe I'm just being contrary to all the FF7 fans, but his SWORD is a GUN and the INTRO is EPIC and then I broke TIME!)
If I were to write an April Fool's scene, it'd be a prologue where a completely non-disabled Emi and Iwanako were dueling with gunblades in the middle of a storm, and then Emi blasted Iwanako right in the chest with a Meltdown spell, and as Iwanako collapsed she Gunblade+R1'd Emi's legs off, then woke up in the Infirmary and was escorted back to the dorms by Instructor Satou. (I guess that would make Momomi Rinoa, because dogs. Hisao is Ellone.)Reese8 wrote:I don't suppose that that means she's eventually going to have to descend into Yamaku's basement to get the school airborne?
This is insightful. In certain ways, Iwanako was the the Emi of her school before her heart attack. There are obvious parallels.BlackWaltzTheThird wrote:Emi generally comes off as a pretty approachable and friendly character, even if she only forms bonds at a surface level. I could easily imagine her having many many acquaintences all through the school, but few if any that are actually her friends. Not unlike your Iwanako, it would seem.
Huuuhhhhh... Perhaps I'm missing a really simple joke, but why Keiko, specifically, other than a shared penchant for playing with hair and the fact that she has one of the best character designs in the whole game? Much like with Molly, I was expecting that people were forgetting Aoi and Keiko were in this fic. Which should prove to be amusing later.dewelar wrote:Yeah, you know, if I had to pick a horse in this race, it'd be this one right now, too -- although Iwanako/Keiko would be the stalking horse .