Thank you everyone for supporting my decision. I won't make the same mistake twice.
Walshy12238 wrote:This might seem a little impatient, but do you have a possible ETA? Or are you going to try to just do it without putting a semi-deadline on it? Either way I'm fine, I'd just like to have something to look forward to reading
I can't give you an ETA because I'm still in the process of proofreading and editing my other chapters. What I can do though, is show you my current To Do List.
1. Finish Author's Notes for Act 0 and Act 1: Chaps 1 - 11
2. Deconstruct Chap 12
3. Rewrite Chap 12
4. Author's Notes for Chap 12
5. Collect Completed Act 0 and Act 1 on pastebin
6. World Build
7. Start on Act 2
Mirage_GSM wrote:Well, it's not really your fault that it was obvious.
For your character it mightn't have been, but we know Hisao's personality, and we know he wouldn't do something like that (in a serious fiction).
I'm fully aware of that. That's not the reason why I'm rewriting it though. Look at Chap 10 and then Chap 11. You'll see that in the former, it was focused mainly on Yaso making progress with his life at Yamaku. The latter, however, was focused on setting the stage for what's to come in Chap 12. I knew that you guys would have figured it out long before I released Chap 12. What I had intended to do with Chap 12 was to show more progress in Yaso's life with what was set up in the previous chapter.
What ended up happening was that Yaso magically progressed with very little indication as to why and the chapter focused more on the surprise that wasn't much of a surprise for anyone who paid attention in the VN. What I posted wasn't the story of Yaso Atoza it was just "Hey look at how Hisao's family has to hide everything and hey look at that, the new guy now knows too." That's why I decided to rewrite it, to shift the focus back to Yaso.
Tormound wrote: If it's not too much to ask can you post the 12th chapter but not link it? Cause i'm curious on what it originally was. Or if you can send it to me in any way ill be grateful. Thank you for your great story.
I'm sorry but I have to decline your request. I know that chapter twelve was only up for about 30 hours and not everyone had a chance to read it. I took it down because while I'm going to rewrite the whole thing, there are still some important elements that are going to be pulled from it.
I want people who haven't read the first version to have fresh eyes when they see it. I don't want key plot points being misrepresented.
I want the people who have read the first version to critique the new version. I will be paying extra attention to those of you who have commented on the first version.
I only ask that you respect my selfish decision.