Too many replies to quote them all, even for me. I've avoided responding in this thread for a little while, simply because I don't really know the right words to say. But please just let me make it clear that I am incredibly, incredibly honored by and grateful for your kind words and support. I should be the one thanking all of you, because this story would always have been nothing if no one had taken the time to read it, and it would have been much worse off without your feedback and criticism. I'm especially grateful to the people who bothered to create an account just to post their thoughts. I know how easy it is to say "that was nice, moving on", so that extra effort means a lot to me.
There are a few things I want to respond to individually, but as far as future plans go: I may get around to writing a few more story ideas I have floating around, but if I do they'll most likely only wind up on my pastebin, which is in my signature. A number of other short stories can be found there that I haven't posted here, so if anyone feels like wasting an afternoon, that's always a suggestion. Beyond that, I have no further plans.
Now I can tell that he’s wearing a deep frown. “Don’t show her this book.” (Hisao)
“Whatever. Did you find anything else?” (???)
Some shuffling. “Well, I guess you could always go with something in here. She likes this kind of crap, right?” (Kenji)
“It’s not crap.” Hisao replies.
The "he" in the first line is still referring to Kenji. I... didn't really expect that anyone would misunderstand that.
Mirage_GSM wrote:I admit, though, that this is hard for even me to read and understand, and I've read a good number of Shakespeare's works (not Cymbeline, though). With Hisao's problems with the English language I doubt he could make heads from tails with this.
True, although he did have roughly an entire week to figure it out.
HD23 wrote:Something that would be really cool would be suggested music for the passages, I was listening to the soundtrack while reading, and when the music and text synced up it was much more intense.
I'm very glad some people were willing to do that, as I feel it enhances the experience quite a lot, but it's not really something I would require or even suggest. Having already read the story once, the appropriate music tracks would be fairly clear, most of the time. I've thought about making a youtube playlist of many of the (non-KS soundtrack) songs that served to inspire or motivate me over the course of the story. Many of them I would listen to as I wrote, and some apply rather well
, but... so many people have so many different tastes in music, so I don't really know whether it would make as much of a reflective experience as I would hope for.
Solistor wrote:My only regret is that there isn't as much art of her as there is of the others.
While that is completely natural and normal, given that she's a tertiary character, and I've already been blessed by a huge amount of fanart for my story alone, I might be able to help with that. Here is a link to my Suzu folder.
It contains almost everything I have saved, barring a few pieces that were either too personal, too explicit (sorry), or the artist might not have been comfortable with it being posted elsewhere. Also, many of the sillier edits that I or others have made I haven't uploaded, because they're, well, silly.
Most of these pictures are from 4chan's Katawa Shoujo General threads, and some of the pieces in this folder are actually ones that I've requested from artists in the past, but haven't linked here in this thread because they weren't made specifically for this story. I would rather not have this thread be derailed into discussing particular pictures, so if anyone has any questions regarding them, I'd be happy to answer what I can through PM.
I also immortalized your story into an eBook. As long as I don't make it available to the public, right?
I don't have any objection to that at all, although like I mentioned, I was thinking of doing the same thing myself eventually. As long as you don't make any changes to the content of the story, feel free to link it here for anyone who would like things in a single, cohesive format.
neio wrote:If you don't mind my asking, for how long have you been writing?
I played around with various works of fanfiction when I was younger, but never produced anything of particular length (or quality) until just recently. Before KS inspired me to try my hand at things again last February, I hadn't written any sort of fiction for five or six years.
neio wrote:So now I wonder: are you done with this story? Not in the sense of adding more plot; that seems pretty well wrapped up, and in any case I'm not sure it would be wise to lengthen the story much further. Several pages back you mentioned wrapping it all up into an ebook or something. While that's a great idea, perhaps you'd be willing to comb over the story more? It would just seem a shame to let a quarter million words worth of effort sit without polishing it off into a finished product. I have a good deal of experience in the area, and I'd be willing to go over the story with you for a few months cleaning up the grammar and making suggestions. (Grammar may not seem very important, but just try to find me a book with a misused comma outside of dialog. Editors don't make $60K per year for nothing.)
Of course, I understand if you want to be done with it; it was obviously no easy task to complete, and you might be exhausted by now.
I am done with this story. While I believe my style and ability have improved a lot since beginning it, and I know for a fact that the final product would be much improved by going back, fixing things here, rewriting things there, it's less an issue of effort and more of integrity. Were this an original novel that I had kept largely to myself and was trying to get published professionally, I would of course do everything to make the story the best it could be. But this was an ongoing effort that was influenced and improved by the input of others as it progressed and was written, and people who are just catching up now deserve to read the same thing that people who have been there from the beginning have read. What's done is done, and, barring typos (thank you for pointing that one out, by the way), I am content to let this story rest.
As far as commas go, I appreciate the gesture, and while some will surely and have still complained, their misuse is deliberate. Over the course of the story I developed a style of flowing, scatterbrained thoughts, and the last half of the piece was something of an experiment in stream of consciousness narrative. Looking back, even that took some time to get the hang of and refine, but I still enjoyed playing with it very much.
Daitengu wrote:Ah~ I've been in the habit of checking the forums for nearly a year just to read your newest chapter. Now that it's done, I dunno what I'm going to do when I come here outa habit lol.
You have no idea.
I feel bad for not quoting every single person. I feel bad for only quoting specific things that I felt needed to be addressed. So please, please believe me when I say thank you
. It's been an honor and a privilege to spend this time trying to give back to the community that helped move and inspire me so much over the course of the last year.