Thank you, I'm glad to hear that.YourFavAnon wrote:This was the best chapter in a good while. Was less of the same and more of something different, which is certainly a relief. Hopefully things continue like this, because this is definitely what I've missed from Act 2 and all.
Thank you. It's great to see a new face, and also quite interesting to see your thoughts as you catch up on the story.Kitsune Spirit wrote:This is gooood!! I love it when Hisao isn't the narrator... and (your) Suzu is an interesting character.
Sometimes I wonder what would have happened if I actually had ended the story there.Kitsune Spirit wrote:... and if I wanted too, the ending of that is just good enough that it could be called a romantic end.
I hope that as you continue in the story, the issue of her guilt becomes a little more clear. In regards to Seiji himself though, d3v14nt13 did a pretty thorough job of explaining things. While I don't think I ever used the exact phrase "pool of blood", according to Suzu's account of things there was quite a lot of it.
I understand what you mean. While I'm sorry that you feel that the plot is dragging, the story is very close to the end now.nemz wrote:As much as I like this fic, I'm ready for it to end already. Between the plot dragging and Suzu's thoughts seeming to take way too long to get from A to B sometimes I'm just burnt out.
Thank you! While it can be difficult to keep track of things in an episodic format like this, and there's a balance to strike before it starts to get repetitive, I've always thought it interesting to see a story play out in different ways.griffon8 wrote:Wonderful chapter. I was so glad Suzu didn't pick Battleship to play.
LegyPlegy wrote:Very interesting story, and I like where it's going. Keep writing, you have a talent for it!
Thank you very much, both of you. It means a lot to see new faces poke in, especially considering how much of a time investment the story has become to the reader. And as far as the neutral end goes, that means it worked!Wookie wrote:Anyhow, i found this to be an excellent read. The neutral ending stung like a bitch though
It was meant to come across less as lethargic mental stuttering and more as an emotional choking. Something like that is difficult to convey in text sure, but experimenting with it has proven fun. Sorry if it didn't work so well that time.ProfAllister wrote:Even for someone who's always half-asleep, this seems a little garbled and disjointed.For a few seconds I just stand there, absorbing his words as they sink deeper and right to the heart of me but I.
Can’t. I, eyes watering. I manage a nod
Okay, so I confess that at first glance I saw your lengthy reply and naturally assumed the worst, bracing myself for the revelation of some gigantic, embarrassing plothole and a twelve step explanation of just how bad I messed up.ProfAllister wrote:Feels like we're making progress again, which is generally a good thing.
Unfortunately, you brought out a new board game. And now I have to go all board game geek on you.
To be honest, I'm perfectly okay with knowing that the Game of Life bit could have been cemented a little further in reality. But it's clear that you know your stuff very well, and I will most certainly defer to you on this subject. (:
Thank you all for reading and responding, even if you have questions or mistakes to point out, especially if you have questions or mistakes to point out. Because I hate making mistakes far more than having someone inform me of my making one. While I'm here I have the good fortune to say that a few people have graciously given me some new pieces of artwork for the Miscellaneous section:
By d3v14nt13: A Private Moment
And by Doomish: Suzu of Vinheim (and Gaping Dragon Plushie)
This story is almost concluded. It has truly been an amazing experience and I owe all of that to the people who took the time to receive it, so again, thank you.