A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)

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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by Elcor » Tue May 22, 2012 11:33 am

YES, A double long dose! Seriously, this just made my week and with the turn of events of the last chapter I can't wait for the next addition.

This line "mobile drilling platform" I just lost it.
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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by lolawesome » Tue May 22, 2012 1:33 pm

Two more wonderful chapters, thank you

The plot seem to have quicken, not that I'm complaining

I enjoy the introspective ones just as equally
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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by nemz » Tue May 22, 2012 4:41 pm

Ah, this is such a fun read. You give all the little background folk such a spark of life, making even the jerky ones a little endearing in their disgruntled jerkitude. :mrgreen:
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Post by Dippeggs » Tue May 22, 2012 4:57 pm

Haha, gaylord.

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Post by The O.H.L. » Wed May 23, 2012 12:09 am

I love the way you are writing this. It's not often that I actually like a story from a girls perspective.
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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by Titus » Wed May 23, 2012 1:19 pm

Thanks for more :mrgreen:

It seems we'll get to know that unknown person mentioned in the very first part of this Suzu story in her dreams. Which is partly why I'm glad you continued writing after your opening post.
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Post by Roamin12 » Wed May 23, 2012 5:52 pm

That double-dose is just what I needed to raise my spirits! Thank you for yet another excellent installment.
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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by griffon8 » Thu May 24, 2012 9:28 pm

Very enjoyable. Suzu seems to be getting a lot of attention in these here forums of late.

Two things that stood out though. Emi & Rin are in 3–4, not 3–1. And I'd be surprised if there were enough runners on Yamaku's track team to field two teams for the relay. It would be much more likely that Emi and Miki would be on the same relay, probably with Miki first, as we know Emi was anchor. Of course, that would mean that Miki would be getting a first place ribbon, so that's easy enough to ignore.

As always though, it's your fic. You can do whatever you want with it.
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Post by Total Destruction » Thu May 24, 2012 9:44 pm

Titus wrote:I really like Suzu and Hisao's relationship, and I love the dialogue that goes on between them. Suzu's thoughts are fun to read, she's quite a thinker when she's awake. That Grim Reaper guy too, I'd love to see whatever happens to him. You can't kill death...
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I'm digging this one, too. All the best fics here have Miki being deliciously Miki, and I gotta agree with the consensus that seeing the same old story through the eyes of the female is pretty killer. Keep it up.
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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by Scissorlips » Sat May 26, 2012 3:24 am

Elcor wrote:Seriously, this just made my week and with the turn of events of the last chapter I can't wait for the next addition.
Wha... seriously? Gosh, wow. Well. Thanks, I'm really glad you enjoyed it, and thank you to everyone else as well. I am extremely lucky to have people who like to read the things I put out, and I'm grateful.

griffon8 wrote:Very enjoyable. Suzu seems to be getting a lot of attention in these here forums of late.

Two things that stood out though. Emi & Rin are in 3–4, not 3–1. And I'd be surprised if there were enough runners on Yamaku's track team to field two teams for the relay. It would be much more likely that Emi and Miki would be on the same relay, probably with Miki first, as we know Emi was anchor. Of course, that would mean that Miki would be getting a first place ribbon, so that's easy enough to ignore.

As always though, it's your fic. You can do whatever you want with it.
Thanks for pointing that out. It's been a while since I've played Emi or Rin's route and frankly I'd forgotten that 3-4 existed, since Hisao and the bunch are in 3-3 and Lilly is in 3-2, I just assumed they were in 3-1. As for the relay race, well... I don't really know how track works and now everybody can see that, haha. I appreciate you pointing those out, it's important for me to know my mistakes just as much, if not more than my successes. And thanks for reading,
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Post by Zombiedude101 » Sun May 27, 2012 5:31 am

I'm really enjoying this, and it's quite interesting in that you've done it from Suzu's point of view rather than Hisao's.
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Post by Henry Spencer » Sun May 27, 2012 6:49 am

I love you Lunch, never stop writing~

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Post by Zombiedude101 » Sun May 27, 2012 11:20 am

If he does then a certain someone's going to wake up with a horse's head on their pillow.
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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by TheSovietOverlord » Sun May 27, 2012 4:27 pm

I am sure Lenin would approve this magnificent story!
Am I the only one who thinks suzu needs to be more friendly to death?

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Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (updated 5/22)

Post by Sin of my sins » Mon May 28, 2012 9:35 am

Just decided to drop by to show my appreciation for all the work you do. This fan-fic and few select others are the sole reason I still find my way in here sometimes. Cheers!
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