Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

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Daitengu
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Post by Daitengu » Fri Apr 06, 2012 2:46 pm

Felt like I was reading an ad lib, summarized, retelling of the good ending from the VN.

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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Post by Brogurt » Fri Apr 06, 2012 3:07 pm

I'm certain there's some way for you to get the same point across without reusing the exact same lines form the good end. There was some good stuff like the broken and battered soul bit, but seeing so many of the exact same lines from the game made me just kind of skip through it.

Also, this sentence was awesome, if a bit lengthy, and there should be more like it, but there wasn't.
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Post by txalolrn9 » Fri Apr 06, 2012 4:27 pm

yeah I can see how just rehashing the convo from the other ending is lame

I'll try to change it
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Post by BobBobberson » Fri Apr 06, 2012 4:51 pm

Wait...so Hisao's with Hanako, but he's going to f**k Misha? What alternate KS route is this and how can I get it in my game?

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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Post by Roamin12 » Fri Apr 06, 2012 7:58 pm

THE TENSES! MY GOD THE TENSES! But whatever, I liked the story until the ending, it felt like a rehashed good ending. The rest of the story however, was pretty good, I really liked the message in the book, a clever idea that was...
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Post by tony246 » Fri Apr 06, 2012 10:11 pm

Ah tenses, the enemy of all mankind. The destroyer of all good thoughts and countless worlds and the master of a million wise. How I hate thee.

But anyway, yeah, good stuff so far man. Of course, I basically call anything not overly heartdestroying good so take that as you will.
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Post by Robnonymous » Sat Apr 07, 2012 8:47 pm

I've there's no Bender in the epilogue I will lose all respect for you and punch you.
Bad Dreams (Hanako) - My first KS fanfic. it's actually a happy story
Reconciliation - (a Hanako bad-end story) - My second KS fanfic. Not all that happy.

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