Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Robnonymous » Tue Mar 20, 2012 10:26 pm

Shipping?
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Brogurt » Tue Mar 20, 2012 10:49 pm

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=shipping

Something very common on most eastern-influenced forms of media, from what I've seen. For example, the countless fan art and fics I've seen pairing Akira and Misha, when there is no reason to do so.

Some people say that this detracts from the canon, but those people are usually not very justified in saying so, in my eyes. Obviously they think they're justified, but that's how the world works.

Point is, you didn't put Hana and Sho together in any romantic way during Recon itself, so writing an epilogue where they make out appears to serve little purpose besides exercising your writing skills and pandering to the people who wanted her to get with SOMEONE since Hisao bit the dust.

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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Mahorfeus » Tue Mar 20, 2012 10:51 pm

The guilt is killing me.
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Robnonymous » Tue Mar 20, 2012 10:58 pm

Brogurt wrote:Point is, you didn't put Hana and Sho together in any romantic way during Recon itself, so writing an epilogue where they make out appears to serve little purpose besides exercising your writing skills and pandering to the people who wanted her to get with SOMEONE since Hisao bit the dust.
I suppose that's one way of looking at it, sure.
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Bagheera » Tue Mar 20, 2012 11:26 pm

Robnonymous wrote:I suppose that's one way of looking at it, sure.
Though not a very useful one, since Sho's intentions during Reconciliation were so fucking obvious that this fic was the natural conclusion.

Don't get me wrong, I want a Lilly/Hanako pairing as much as the next guy. But given the setup here it just wasn't in the cards, and the story wasn't particularly subtle about that point.
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by CNB » Fri Mar 23, 2012 3:34 pm

Well, I thought it was very cute.

It was a good idea to make it explicitly separate from Reconciliation. Connecting them more strongly would have taken the focus off the Hanako/Lilly relationship that was the central point of the main story.

If I were writing it, I'd have ended with a different punchline. :wink:
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Robnonymous » Fri Mar 23, 2012 6:50 pm

CNB wrote:Well, I thought it was very cute.

It was a good idea to make it explicitly separate from Reconciliation. Connecting them more strongly would have taken the focus off the Hanako/Lilly relationship that was the central point of the main story.
:mrgreen:

And that was exactly my reasoning for keeping them separate. I felt like this being an "official" part of Reconciliation would cheapen the ending (and the whole point, really) quite a bit. Glad I'm not the only one who thinks so.
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Beoran » Sat Apr 07, 2012 7:16 pm

Im late to the party but I enjoyed this and the Reconcilliation fanfic. It's a straightforward story but those also need to be written. Hope your book pans out. :)
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by Robnonymous » Sat Apr 07, 2012 8:46 pm

I appreciate appreciation no matter how "late" it may pop up. :D

Thanks for letting me know you liked it!
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by # 2 » Mon Jun 04, 2012 7:35 pm

Great story, puts a nice capstone on Reconciliation, in my opinion.

Also, I enjoyed Sho's character. He's just another guy who has no idea how to tell a girl he's madly in love with her. I feel his pain. ;) Or felt his pain, since he gets the girl of his dreams while *I* read cheesy romance fiction.

The bastard.
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Re: Checkmate (A Reconciliation Epilogue)

Post by NighthawK » Sat Jun 01, 2013 10:34 am

Just started reading it, then I finished it in about an hour.

Thoughts:

WTF are you doing Hisao? 8 years in a relationship, 3 years married and no Lilly Jr.s? Did the side-effects of your med get to ya?


I mean really maybe there could've been space for at least baby Lilly Jr. in the story.
Good story though, don't mind me so much, its just the Feels talking. I'd just feel better for Lilly if she at least had a kid to keep her company.
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