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Post by Ilithandie » Sun Mar 24, 2013 12:34 pm

Thank your for the wonderful story. Just finished Rin's arc and then I find this a lovly continuation. Take your time writing I for one would rather wait for the amazing story than get smaller "rushed" peices. If that makes sence.
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Post by dewelar » Tue Jul 23, 2013 7:02 pm

Just discovered this and found it...very intriguing :) . I see it's been a long time since it's been updated, and hope it hasn't been altogether abandoned.
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Post by Wookie » Thu Jul 25, 2013 8:29 am

dewelar wrote:Just discovered this and found it...very intriguing :) . I see it's been a long time since it's been updated, and hope it hasn't been altogether abandoned.
The OP hasn't logged back in since almost a year ago, so its probably safe to say this is dead fic
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Post by dewelar » Thu Jul 25, 2013 2:50 pm

Wookie wrote:
dewelar wrote:Just discovered this and found it...very intriguing :) . I see it's been a long time since it's been updated, and hope it hasn't been altogether abandoned.
The OP hasn't logged back in since almost a year ago, so its probably safe to say this is dead fic
Oh, sure, but you never know. Perhaps someday they'll wander their way back here and see that someone's still interested. There's so few works of quality about Rin as it is :( .
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Post by Hoitash » Fri Jul 26, 2013 12:25 am

dewelar wrote:
Wookie wrote:
dewelar wrote:Just discovered this and found it...very intriguing :) . I see it's been a long time since it's been updated, and hope it hasn't been altogether abandoned.
The OP hasn't logged back in since almost a year ago, so its probably safe to say this is dead fic
Oh, sure, but you never know. Perhaps someday they'll wander their way back here and see that someone's still interested. There's so few works of quality about Rin as it is :( .
I've noticed that, too. She is pretty hard to write well, and I imagine a lot of people are intimidated by that, and have a hard time understanding her.
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Post by forgetmenot » Fri Jul 26, 2013 1:27 am

Hoitash wrote:
dewelar wrote:
Wookie wrote:The OP hasn't logged back in since almost a year ago, so its probably safe to say this is dead fic
Oh, sure, but you never know. Perhaps someday they'll wander their way back here and see that someone's still interested. There's so few works of quality about Rin as it is :( .
I've noticed that, too. She is pretty hard to write well, and I imagine a lot of people are intimidated by that, and have a hard time understanding her.
I've come to the conclusion that Rin is difficult to write mostly because in her route Hisao is pretty oblivious. There are so many times when I nearly screamed at the screen (which I guess is a credit to the writing) because of Hisao's unfathomable thickheadedness. I just recently incorporated Rin into my fic, and while her dialog certainly took the bulk of the effort, I was surprised at how difficult it was to write Hisao in a way that wouldn't paint him as a complete moron for not understanding some of the things Rin says.

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Post by dewelar » Fri Jul 26, 2013 7:18 am

forgetmenot wrote:
Hoitash wrote:
dewelar wrote:There's so few works of quality about Rin as it is :( .
I've noticed that, too. She is pretty hard to write well, and I imagine a lot of people are intimidated by that, and have a hard time understanding her.
I've come to the conclusion that Rin is difficult to write mostly because in her route Hisao is pretty oblivious. There are so many times when I nearly screamed at the screen (which I guess is a credit to the writing) because of Hisao's unfathomable thickheadedness. I just recently incorporated Rin into my fic, and while her dialog certainly took the bulk of the effort, I was surprised at how difficult it was to write Hisao in a way that wouldn't paint him as a complete moron for not understanding some of the things Rin says.
Somehow, this feels like a challenge.

Will think harder.
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Post by Sea » Tue Jul 30, 2013 7:47 am

forgetmenot wrote:
Hoitash wrote:
dewelar wrote:
I've noticed that, too. She is pretty hard to write well, and I imagine a lot of people are intimidated by that, and have a hard time understanding her.
I've come to the conclusion that Rin is difficult to write mostly because in her route Hisao is pretty oblivious. There are so many times when I nearly screamed at the screen (which I guess is a credit to the writing) because of Hisao's unfathomable thickheadedness. I just recently incorporated Rin into my fic, and while her dialog certainly took the bulk of the effort, I was surprised at how difficult it was to write Hisao in a way that wouldn't paint him as a complete moron for not understanding some of the things Rin says.
Somehow, this feels like a challenge.

Will think harder.
Maybe the goal is to think less.
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Post by dewelar » Tue Jul 30, 2013 9:34 am

Sea wrote:
dewelar wrote:
forgetmenot wrote: I just recently incorporated Rin into my fic, and while her dialog certainly took the bulk of the effort, I was surprised at how difficult it was to write Hisao in a way that wouldn't paint him as a complete moron for not understanding some of the things Rin says.
Somehow, this feels like a challenge.

Will think harder.
Maybe the goal is to think less.
*nods* That's how my (now pretty clearly one-shot) Diary came to me. Problem now is where to go with it.
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Post by Sea » Sat Feb 01, 2014 9:22 am

*sigh*
Just read through this again and marveled in the rininess, and sad that this one died. You wrote some of the best Rin on this site Homeless, I hope you come back!
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Post by monkeywitha6pack » Sun Feb 02, 2014 6:19 pm

The last day at hisaos parents house made me tear up, great story
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