Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by BlackWaltzTheThird » Sun Jun 03, 2012 10:24 am

It would seem I'm fairly late to the party, but I've finally gotten around to reading all of this. I'm very much enjoying what I've read so far, especially with this whole 'repressed bitch' thing that Saki has. A guest before espoused the idea that just because you have a... - well, I'll refrain from repeating his language - it doesn't mean you have to act like one. I really hope there is some justification for these outbursts soon.

Anyway, I'm relatively surprised at Saki's forwardness and aggressive pursual of the relationship. It outranks even Emi in terms of development speed. This leads me to believe that their relationship is built on lies. Or, at least, Saki's side is. I do believe such a concept was put forth in one of the 'how we got here' things. It will be interesting to see whether or not this develops.

It also strikes me as odd that Rika appears to have disappeared entirely. I last saw her when the three of them were in the cafeteria together, and Rika left on account of Hisao and Saki's cloying lovey-dovey-ness. Why make them out to be friends (or, at least, mutually agreeable acquaintances) if they aren't going to appear together. That said, would I be wrong in assuming that the line about Rika running with Miki is a reference to Rikabro's fic?

I'm looking forward to what else this story has in store for everyone. O, waiting, the curse of reading fanfiction. Don't worry, I'm happy to wait as long as it takes. Keep up the good work, sir.
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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by Bagheera » Sun Jun 03, 2012 11:12 am

BlackWaltzTheThird wrote:It also strikes me as odd that Rika appears to have disappeared entirely. I last saw her when the three of them were in the cafeteria together, and Rika left on account of Hisao and Saki's cloying lovey-dovey-ness. Why make them out to be friends (or, at least, mutually agreeable acquaintances) if they aren't going to appear together. That said, would I be wrong in assuming that the line about Rika running with Miki is a reference to Rikabro's fic?
I could be wrong, but it seemed to me like Themocaw had a very different take on Rika than Rikabro did. That might be (part of) the reason why she dropped out of the story.
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Post by Mirage_GSM » Sun Jun 03, 2012 6:19 pm

Also - and I, too, could be wrong - I think this story's mention of Rika running with Miki predates Rikabro's.
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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by Elcor » Sun Jun 03, 2012 6:23 pm

Maybe Themocaw gave her a backseat since Saki was spending more time with Hiaso. Now at least to her, her role was lessened in Saki's life and that is why we don't see her.
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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by Panthour » Wed Jun 20, 2012 4:55 pm

I just read all of this again :D I'm loving it so far and can't wait to see where it goes, nice job!
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Post by Scissorlips » Thu Jun 21, 2012 1:44 am

I finally found the time to read everything you have up so far and I agree with everyone else, I'm really enjoying the story so far and hope you find the time and means to pick things up again soon. I have a fever, more Saki, etc. The post-poker scene had me laughing out loud for about five minutes straight.
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Post by BeastlyFerret » Tue Jul 03, 2012 3:33 am

Read this all over, again! Can't wait for the next installment! (sorry to those who got an alert and thought themocaw posted)
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Skip Mode

Post by themocaw » Tue Jul 10, 2012 1:35 pm

//. . . wow it's been months since I last played Katawa Shoujo. I really should finish Saki's route and go for the good ending this time.//

//Let's see. Where did I leave off?//

//Oh right. . . with the coffee scene. Well, this next part is kinda dull. . .//


> Skip Mode

//Hm. Let's see. . . oh yes. Saki and Hisao hang out. There's this really insipid scene where they sit on the roof and Saki is irritatingly cute again. . . boring! Seriously, we get it already, you don't need to keep hammering it in.//

//Another Fashion Club meeting. . . argh. Okay, I get it, you want us to understand that Hisao is bored and tired, but did you have to make it so boring and tiring to read? Well, Hisao can suck it. I've got power over time and space. SKIP!//

//Oh. This part's actually kinda cool.//


> End Skip Mode

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"Woah! Careful there, kid!"

The big man's disarming smile helps mitigate the intimidation factor of his appearance. Between his beat-up black leather jacket, buzz-cut hair, and sheer height, he resembles nothing more than an outright thug.

If so, he's at least a friendly thug, as he helps me to my feet and dusts off the back of my jacket.

"Better watch where you're going, kiddo. I almost wiped you out."

"Yes, I. . . sorry, sir!"

"Are you intimidating my students again, Keiji?"

Mutou comes out of the staff room, pulling on his ever-present brown overcoat. "Oh. Nakai. What brings you here?"

Did he forget?

"I brought you the. . . uhh. . ."

Unsure what to say next, I simply hand over my report.

"Oh, right! Right!" Mutou says, snapping his fingers. He takes the paper from me and scans it briefly before tucking it into his briefcase. "Thank you, Nakai. I'll give you this one, but next time, please be sure to have your homework with you when you come to class in the morning."

"Oh? This one of your kids, Akio?" the stranger asks curiously.

"Well, yes. Hisao Nakai, my brother, Keiji Mutou. Keiji, Hisao Nakai."

"Cool, cool. He a trouble-maker, bro?" Keiji asks. "Want me to take him out back and straighten him out? Put the fear of the law into him?"

Mutou's brother puts two huge, hamlike hands together and cracks his knuckles ominously.

"No, he is NOT," Mutou sighs. "Stop treating all of my students like delinque--"

"DAAAARLING!!" Saki's high-pitched voice calls down the hallway. "You're so mean! Running away from me like. . ."

She freezes in place as she rounds the corner. Eyes wide, and mouth hanging open, she looks back and forth between me, Mutou, and his brother. . .

"Darling. . .? Woah! Holy crap, kid. You're dating THAT? Not bad!" Keiji slaps my back and puts a friendly arm around my shoulders. "I got it all wrong, Akio. Kid's not a delinquent, he's a lady-killer! What's your name, princess?"

". . . you've actually met already," Mutou says. "Saki. . . Enomoto, right?"

". . . right," Saki replies. Her voice is cold and hard. The unexpected hostility in it makes me flinch.

"What? Holy crap, it IS Saki! Damn, girl, you clean up good! How you liking Yamaku? People here treating you okay?"

"It's fine," Saki says, in that same cold, curt voice.

"Well, keep it up, then, kiddo. Don't break the kid's heart, okay?"

Mutou's brother gives me another friendly slap on the back, then puts his arm around his brother's shoulders. "C'mon, bro. Let's get going. Leave the two lovebirds alone."

"Yeah," Saki mutters. "You do that."

Mutou and his brother head off, leaving me and Saki alone together in the hallway with the lingering question that remains unanswered.

"Saki?"

"Yes, darling?"

"How do you know Mutou's brother?"

In reply, Saki takes me by the shoulders and gives me a kiss.

"Don't worry about it, darling," she says, smiling a bit wistfully. "It's not worth worrying over."

> Insist
Never mind.


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//To be continued.//

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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by Goliath548 » Tue Jul 10, 2012 2:02 pm

Hmm... the plot thickens!

Now I just have to reread the past 3 posts so I can remember exactly what is happening here.
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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by nemz » Tue Jul 10, 2012 2:23 pm

Yeah, insist. Enough of this 'Darling' bullshit already. (though I appreciate the use of 'skip mode' :) )
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Post by spirizu » Tue Jul 10, 2012 2:39 pm

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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by Mirage_GSM » Tue Jul 10, 2012 4:58 pm

I prefer short and interesting chapters to long and long-winding ones.
This chapter luckily falls into the former category.
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Post by Kayo12 » Tue Jul 10, 2012 5:03 pm

God, I love Saki! She would be the best route if she were in the game. I love this thing so much, Saki is a delightful bitch. I can't wait to see where it goes.
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Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route

Post by Meadows » Tue Jul 10, 2012 7:53 pm

  • Mutou has a thug-like brother that randomly shows up
  • He knows Saki
  • Saki is not happy to see him
You best not be going where I think you're going with this... ala 'Watch, or Don't Watch'
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Post by Kayo12 » Tue Jul 10, 2012 8:16 pm

Meadows wrote:
  • Mutou has a thug-like brother that randomly shows up
  • He knows Saki
  • Saki is not happy to see him
You best not be going where I think you're going with this... ala 'Watch, or Don't Watch'
You should read 'Bowl of Noodles'.
And we don't talk about that fic. :(
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