"Can You Open Your Heart?" - a Rika pseudo-route

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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Exbando » Fri Mar 23, 2012 6:05 pm

I'm really enjoying this story. The way Rika gets described, I keep thinking she's albino, even though she walks around in the sunlight.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by BlackWaltzTheThird » Fri Mar 23, 2012 9:14 pm

Great new scenes you've got here, Rikabro. You actually had me going backwards through the pages to find out what words Hisao meant when referring to those that could have been Rika's last. "I'm so sorry", as it turns out. I'm also very impressed by your Rin. Absolutely nailed it, I'm sure Aura would be proud. Rika's perspective on death makes for interesting reading.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Titus » Sat Mar 24, 2012 12:42 am

Loving the Rika appearance, made me D'AWWW until my heart melted and the Rika scene in general was nice as more of Rika's past is revealed. Rin was interesting too, I guess Hisao and Rika appear outwardly as people fed up with life. Yet they find happiness in each others company.

Can't wait for more!
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Mahorfeus » Sat Mar 24, 2012 1:31 am

You and themocaw are really giving me a run for my money... but when I throw it at the screen, nothing happens.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by BlackWaltzTheThird » Sat Mar 24, 2012 1:48 am

Mahorfeus wrote:You and themocaw are really giving me a run for my money... but when I throw it at the screen, nothing happens.
Perhaps you should try inserting it into the cd drive.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Vekter » Sat Mar 24, 2012 2:30 am

Damn it, you... you keep bein' awesome, Rikabro. I can't say anything past that; it's fantastic.

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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Mirage_GSM » Sat Mar 24, 2012 3:03 am

Excellent!
The best chapter so far, and that's saying something.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by DelusionsOfGrandeur » Sat Mar 24, 2012 3:04 am

BlackWaltzTheThird wrote:
Mahorfeus wrote:You and themocaw are really giving me a run for my money... but when I throw it at the screen, nothing happens.
Perhaps you should try inserting it into the cd drive.
Yeah, if you put the money in the Cash Deposit drive it should take. While on the subject does anyone know how to dislodge a credit card from a floppy drive?

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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by BlackWaltzTheThird » Sat Mar 24, 2012 9:30 am

DelusionsOfGrandeur wrote:
BlackWaltzTheThird wrote:
Mahorfeus wrote:You and themocaw are really giving me a run for my money... but when I throw it at the screen, nothing happens.
Perhaps you should try inserting it into the cd drive.
Yeah, if you put the money in the Cash Deposit drive it should take. While on the subject does anyone know how to dislodge a credit card from a floppy drive?
It's pretty easy, just hit the 'Return' key, you should find it near the 'Any' key.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by bradpara » Sat Mar 24, 2012 7:51 pm

Cool, why did I hear "Breathlessly" when I was reading the scene wth Rika.

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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by The O.H.L. » Sun Mar 25, 2012 9:40 am

I can't stop reading this. It's 2:40 in the morning and I can't stop. But I guess I have to for now, but please continue, it makes for an incredible read.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Mealforthree » Sun Mar 25, 2012 12:36 pm

This, my dear friend, this is great.

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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Triscuitable » Sun Mar 25, 2012 11:29 pm

I've gone through this, reread it over and over again, and I can easily say that you're a master at this.

Also, I hate fanfiction. But this made me ignore that fact so quickly, that I relinquished that hate very quickly. Still hate crossfics though.

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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by The O.H.L. » Sun Mar 25, 2012 11:41 pm

Triscuitable wrote:I've gone through this, reread it over and over again, and I can easily say that you're a master at this.

Also, I hate fanfiction. But this made me ignore that fact so quickly, that I relinquished that hate very quickly. Still hate crossfics though.

EDIT: Being the jolly good newbie I am, I don't know how to subscribe to excellence. Would someone please direct my in the location of the nearest subscription button?
Under the board index section of the toolbar thingy, it says view your posts, and it show all your posts, and put the most recently updated thread at the top of the list. Closest thing to a subscription as far as I know.
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Re: Rika Story - updated 3/23/2012

Post by Triscuitable » Sun Mar 25, 2012 11:53 pm

The O.H.L. wrote:
Triscuitable wrote:I've gone through this, reread it over and over again, and I can easily say that you're a master at this.

Also, I hate fanfiction. But this made me ignore that fact so quickly, that I relinquished that hate very quickly. Still hate crossfics though.

EDIT: Being the jolly good newbie I am, I don't know how to subscribe to excellence. Would someone please direct my in the location of the nearest subscription button?
Under the board index section of the toolbar thingy, it says view your posts, and it show all your posts, and put the most recently updated thread at the top of the list. Closest thing to a subscription as far as I know.
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