Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Mahorfeus » Thu Mar 08, 2012 5:58 pm

I really liked it. Asides from being a rare Emi fic, it utilizes an external conflict rather well. And of course, you managed to capture her sexual promiscuity pretty well.
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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Lothbrok » Thu Mar 08, 2012 10:03 pm

I read the redone ending and i thought it was great! but I'm no professional or anything so i can only give you my thoughts and i felt that when Emi's mother and Hisao are talking it felt a bit forced at the beginning but i suck at this so i might be completely in the wrong here.

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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Mountaineer » Thu Mar 08, 2012 11:17 pm

Lothbrok wrote:I read the redone ending and i thought it was great! but I'm no professional or anything so i can only give you my thoughts and i felt that when Emi's mother and Hisao are talking it felt a bit forced at the beginning but i suck at this so i might be completely in the wrong here.
Thanks! Yes I've heard that Hisao does act quite 'robotic' around Mrs. Ibarazaki at times. I've done my best to rewrite it so far, but I can only do so much! I'd like to think that this is remedied through their interaction at the end of the story, as Hisao relaxes more around Mrs. Ibarazaki.

In any case, I just had some INCREDIBLE fanart made inspired by a scene in the fic. My thanks go out to twrlare and two-face who made the drawing and coloring possible. It's top notch!

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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by YOTC » Fri Mar 09, 2012 1:53 am

Mountaineer wrote:Oh! I tried to do some research before writing, including what hiking legs would actually look like. This is actually by no means the final revision of this tale, so I will be sure to edit the content to reflect the time it takes to get such a pair of legs made. Is there any more pertinent information I should know?
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The sock thing you mentioned, most people wear socks on their prognostics to protect the shoes all the time. Emi is wearing socks on her normal walking legs in KS all the time to protect both the prosthetic and the shoes. It's like walking in shoes without socks on, just rub rub rub all day and no barrier, causes excessive wear and tear. Other than that I'm not gonna bitch and moan about how much force a set of hiking legs can take as if they're not made of titanium I could see them taking that damage or close to it.

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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Mountaineer » Fri Mar 09, 2012 9:39 am

YOTC wrote:
Mountaineer wrote:Oh! I tried to do some research before writing, including what hiking legs would actually look like. This is actually by no means the final revision of this tale, so I will be sure to edit the content to reflect the time it takes to get such a pair of legs made. Is there any more pertinent information I should know?
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The sock thing you mentioned, most people wear socks on their prognostics to protect the shoes all the time. Emi is wearing socks on her normal walking legs in KS all the time to protect both the prosthetic and the shoes. It's like walking in shoes without socks on, just rub rub rub all day and no barrier, causes excessive wear and tear. Other than that I'm not gonna bitch and moan about how much force a set of hiking legs can take as if they're not made of titanium I could see them taking that damage or close to it.
I guess I hadn't considered that... hm.

Well, I guess everyone can suspend their disbelief right? Otherwise I'd be out of a hobby. :(

Also, new art submitted, everyone! Great quality, thanks you dubs!

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Post by CarnivalNights » Fri Mar 09, 2012 2:02 pm

That was a great read. Any other plans for more fanfic?
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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Mountaineer » Fri Mar 09, 2012 8:19 pm

CarnivalNights wrote:That was a great read. Any other plans for more fanfic?
Expect something late Sunday in EST timezone!

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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Otakumon » Fri Mar 09, 2012 11:28 pm

Mountaineer wrote:Hanako
Gesundheit!

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Post by Bagheera » Sat Mar 10, 2012 11:26 am

That was a fun little fic. We don't have enough Emi around here, so it was a really nice change of pace. My only nitpick would be that getting wet doesn't make you sick. Hypothermia's a concern, of course, and being cold weakens your immune system so that you're more likely to be infected if you're exposed to a pathogen, but without that exposure (which is unlikely on the side of a mountain unless one of them was exposed before they left) nobody's getting sick. Cold, miserable, exhausted, dehydrated, and very much in danger, yes, but not sick.

But it's not like this comes up with any sort of regularity, so eh. It's Emi, it's all good! :mrgreen:
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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Mountaineer » Sun Mar 11, 2012 11:07 am

Mountaineer wrote:
CarnivalNights wrote:That was a great read. Any other plans for more fanfic?
Expect something late Sunday in EST timezone!

Hanako
I lied. :( Will have to be delayed a bit. Sorry gents!

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Post by CosmicCricket » Sun Mar 11, 2012 7:55 pm

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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Mahorfeus » Sun Mar 11, 2012 7:58 pm

Take your time. :)
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Post by CarnivalNights » Sun Mar 11, 2012 9:12 pm

Mountaineer wrote:
CarnivalNights wrote:That was a great read. Any other plans for more fanfic?
Expect something late Sunday in EST timezone!

Hanako
Gah! I read the spoiler!
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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by CosmicCricket » Mon Mar 12, 2012 2:23 am

Loved this, it is right up there with Going the Distance and Fractal Butterfly.

One problem: Hisao is way smarter in this fiction than he is in the game. Though I suppose it's not that much of a problem. :wink:
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Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Post by Homeless » Mon Mar 12, 2012 1:38 pm

The hell man? So many feels... *turns head and wipes a manly tear from my eye*

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