Yeah, this has come up a few times in this fic and its brethren. There are also recurring pronoun issues; when writing about "she and I" or "Hanako and her" or whatever remember to drop the other party to determine the correct pronoun (e.g. "She always spoke of Hanako's and her going to the store" vs. "She always spoke of she and Hanako going to the store"; this one's tricky, but since "going to the store" is a gerund clause you want to use possessive tense and a possessive determiner here, i.e. your/my/his/her/etc. More on that here). This will solve a lot of problems. If you're looking at how it actually works rather than what sounds right remember to keep your subjects and objects straight.Mirage_GSM wrote:Minor nitpick:
This is a minor issue though. The story itself is coming along nicely.