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Post by Doomish » Wed Feb 22, 2012 9:50 pm

Forget it.
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Re: Little Faith

Post by griffon8 » Wed Feb 22, 2012 10:34 pm

Doomish wrote:And, I promise, there's not going to be any gore or body horror this time. The fact that I even have to say this is kind of funny.
Thank you.
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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by misterprinny » Wed Feb 22, 2012 10:45 pm

New series by one of my favorite authors on the Internet? I couldn't have asked for anything better.

I eagerly await your next chapter :D keep up the good work, sir!
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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Demonhornz » Wed Feb 22, 2012 10:47 pm

Aha, no body horror, but you assured us tragedy shall always seep in no matter what you try to do. And I'm pretty sure you're not trying to make a fluffy story, so I can expect much drama (of course, the prologue there already told us as much). And Mutou's timeline stuff will probably come into effect. Eheh.

You really are a very quick and incredible writer. And even if this has a sad ending like With Apologies, I'll still probably end up loving it (like With Apologies :lol: )

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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Nekken » Wed Feb 22, 2012 10:52 pm

Ooh yay; more Doomish. Excellent.
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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Mahorfeus » Wed Feb 22, 2012 11:10 pm

Ah yes, so it begins. So happy.

And now to wait for it all to fall apart. :twisted:

On a more serious note, I've found myself to be a fan of your writing style. I'll be keeping an eye on this, for sure.
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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Lothbrok » Wed Feb 22, 2012 11:41 pm

More lovely stories!

So 'Cutter' is finished? For some reason I had the impression that it would have a few more chapters. Oh well I'll take what i can get!

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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Doomish » Wed Feb 22, 2012 11:42 pm

Cutter has one more chapter to go, I promise I'll get to it eventually! :oops:

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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Pyrokinesis1019 » Thu Feb 23, 2012 4:03 am

Hot damn, you're back with more already? You sir, are amazing. Also, does this mean that you're going to have references to all your previous works in each story? (Except for With Apologies, that might be kinda tricky)

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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Mirage_GSM » Thu Feb 23, 2012 5:15 am

Glad you put your skills to work writing something I might enjoy more this time ;-)
Seems to be an interesting concept. Let's see where it goes.

Still some things to comment on:

Hisao was released from hospital after a heart attack and heart surgery after just one weekend? Really? Medical technology in your story is really SciFi ;-)

I think it's a bit weird that Mutou is teaching quack theories like they were facts. The scientist within him has to have gone on vacation... Or is this supposed to be scientific fact in your story? If so you might want Mutou to cite one or two examples of time-clones actually meeting each other.
Did Kenji throw him off the roof like he said he definitely wasn't going to?
I think Kenji said that in Emi's path only, but maybe Hisao somehow glimpsed a different timeline ;-)
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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Zoram » Thu Feb 23, 2012 5:37 am

Laughed at the reference to With Apologies (there's the alway fascinating theory that dreams, and human fantasies in general, are in fact telepathic communication with the infinite parallel universes - somewhere, everything that exists in fiction is happening), and at the fourth-wall breaking lesson of Mutou. I hadn't read much of Cutter so I didn't spot the reference.

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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by GG Crono » Thu Feb 23, 2012 2:20 pm

Looks like this could shape up to be interesting. There's a couple of grammatical snafus (some periods where there should be commas in dialog, for one) but overall it's well-composed.

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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by andros414 » Thu Feb 23, 2012 2:37 pm

Looking forward to more, just hoping that the "Sci-Fi" part doesn't get too out there. :wink:
Zoram wrote:<snip> (there's the alway fascinating theory that dreams, and human fantasies in general, are in fact telepathic communication with the infinite parallel universes - somewhere, everything that exists in fiction is happening), <snip>
I prefer to think of it less as "telepathic communication" and more along the lines of things "bleeding through." Such as ghosts not being the souls of the deceased, but glimpses of another world where said person is not only still alive, but the time of that world flows differently enough to seem like "the past" from our perspective. The "bleeding through" version also fits with Mutou's explanation of the alternate timelines crossing over. :D
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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Doomish » Thu Feb 23, 2012 3:20 pm

Forget it.
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Re: Little Faith [Lilly Good Ending Extension, Spoilers, Sci

Post by Demonhornz » Thu Feb 23, 2012 3:34 pm

Damn, Doomish. You're crazy good at this.

Hm, maybe I should try Cutter again...

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