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Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 8:02 pm
by Doomish
Forget it.

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 9:23 pm
by Robnonymous
I'm not going to lie, this was hard for me to read. Both as an avid Hanako fan and someone who was in a tentative relationship with a girl who would cut herself. But in a way, I suppose that's the highest compliment I could give. It made me uncomfortable and extremely sad, and I can't wait to read more. :)

So long as Hanako manages to turn things around. :cry:

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 11:58 pm
by Brogurt
Never before has pain felt so good.

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 12:30 am
by boredism
Intriguing read, just wondering why Hanako will cut her non-scared arm instead of her already scared arm so she could hide it better...
just one slight mistake:
were going at it like rabbits with here supposedly asleep in the other room.
Awaiting next chapter...

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 5:21 am
by Doomish
Forget it.

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 5:32 am
by Mirage_GSM
The emphasis on Hanako's downward spiral isn't going to let up any time soon, unfortunately.
When it does you might give a heads up.
I guess I'll skip the chapters until then...

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 1:13 pm
by scott1and
I read the first two chapters, and from what I saw they were written pretty well. This isn't really my kinda thing, so I'll just stop here, but good job on the narrative...depressing as it may be.

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 4:03 pm
by Doomish
Forget it.

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 7:02 pm
by boredism
its quite an interesting read, you seem to always have one typo in your writing... but anyways surprised to see that lily hasn't really told anyone... asked the therapist or doctor for advice or whatnot... or maybe she did just that no one reacted or didn't because she'd feel guilty or smth... hmm... well time to get back to work!

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 8:12 pm
by Brogurt
Felt like it was going to turn into a yuri fapfic at some points, and the insanity bit with the knife stabbing the desk seemed cliched. To be honest, I'd like to see some Hisao in this, maybe showing genuine concern for Hana, but she thinks that he's just obliged to because Lilly feels the same. But maybe that's too farfetched; after all, this particular Hisao was enough of a faggot to go on Lilly's route in the first place.

Also what the hell is up with that posting frequency
Do you have this stuff already written or what

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 8:25 pm
by Doomish
Brogurt wrote:Felt like it was going to turn into a yuri fapfic at some points, and the insanity bit with the knife stabbing the desk seemed cliched. To be honest, I'd like to see some Hisao in this, maybe showing genuine concern for Hana, but she thinks that he's just obliged to because Lilly feels the same. But maybe that's too farfetched; after all, this particular Hisao was enough of a faggot to go on Lilly's route in the first place.

Also what the hell is up with that posting frequency
Do you have this stuff already written or what
There will be no fapfic here, you can trust in that much. And, to answer your question, no, I don't have it written all the way. I have a rough outline of what I want to have happen but that's really all. I write at every opportunity, I always carry my stories around on a flash drive so I can work on them when I get a chance. I try to post two chapters a day, which is only 4,000 or so words, not that much. Speaking of which, there'll be one later tonight. The story's getting close to being over already, it's not extremely long, just an excursion from what everyone thinks and knows about KS.

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 9:46 pm
by Doomish
Forget it.

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2012 1:36 am
by Bipolar Hernandez
....

Jesus.

Fucking.

Christ.

I...I think I should run through Hanako's path again....

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2012 3:03 am
by boredism
Even Hanako's bad end seemed brighter than this,
but anyways I do question Hanako's ability to go so many days without food, I think Hisao's reaction is... dull... I expected more emotion from Hisao...
Lets go harass my Hanako fan friends with this now...

Re: Cutter [Lilly/Hanako Spoilers]

Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2012 8:08 am
by Mirage_GSM
This has gotten quite bizarre...
There's no way nobody would notice the communal bathroom in the dorm looking like a slaughterhouse for several days, especially in a place like Yamaku with Hanako havinbg regular appointments with a shrink.
Falling asleep in a filled bathtub with slit arteries is a good way never to wake up again - actually I was surprised when she did wake up again in chapter 1.
That Hanako belongs in a padded cell with all sharp objects taken away from her.
Regarding Lilly, I don't think she would have neglected to inform the nurse. She's much too responsible for that.
Around here she would probably be charged with failure to render assistance - up to five years in prison, more than that should Hanako have died. I'm not sure about the legal situation in Japan...