Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by Jaden82 » Mon May 09, 2011 8:59 am

DaMan65 wrote:DAWWWWWWWWW!!!!!

I really liked that props to you good sir

I felt happy when Hiaso confessed but the sad realization that Misha's still like that mad me sad again

But you did say this was a tragedy
Well, I could type an epilogue out...one that would probably make even me tear up writing it out...or I could leave this on a somewhat bittersweet ending. I just thought this was the best way.
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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by A1phaDrag0n » Mon May 09, 2011 9:08 am

There clearly can't be a happy ending, but some finality might help, just thinking of them forever stuck in limbo :(
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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by scott1and » Mon May 09, 2011 12:05 pm

This was pretty awesome, your writing style is pretty good, well...actually, so was the whole damn story. well done :mrgreen:
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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by bradpara » Mon May 09, 2011 12:10 pm

Jaden82 wrote:
DaMan65 wrote:DAWWWWWWWWW!!!!!

I really liked that props to you good sir

I felt happy when Hiaso confessed but the sad realization that Misha's still like that mad me sad again

But you did say this was a tragedy
Well, I could type an epilogue out...one that would probably make even me tear up writing it out...or I could leave this on a somewhat bittersweet ending. I just thought this was the best way.
An older, and happily married Hisao and Shizune comming home from the hospital, carrying their first born child, a little girl named Misha.
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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by Jaden82 » Mon May 09, 2011 12:16 pm

I've read that somewhere else on the boards. I can't remember which tread though. Don't wanna use that now that it's been thought up by someone else.

I could add my own twist.

An older and recently widowed Shizune leaves the hospital with a baby. She named the boy Hisao after her deceased husband, who died young of a heart attack due to his condition. She thought she would be alone in the world after the deaths of Misha and Hisao, but now a glimmer of hope appeared with her child.

Dammit...I'm such a bastard....and sad.:(
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Post by bradpara » Mon May 09, 2011 12:39 pm

Jaden82 wrote:I've read that somewhere else on the boards. I can't remember which tread though. Don't wanna use that now that it's been thought up by someone else.

I could add my own twist.

An older and recently widowed Shizune leaves the hospital with a baby. She named the boy Hisao after her deceased husband, who died young of a heart attack due to his condition. She thought she would be alone in the world after the deaths of Misha and Hisao, but now a glimmer of hope appeared with her child.

Dammit...I'm such a bastard....and sad.:(
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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by Jaden82 » Mon May 09, 2011 12:46 pm

bradpara wrote: You secretly work for Key Visual Arts Don't you :P
I think I'd come up with some nice ideas for suffering for them. :)

I enjoyed Clannad and Kanon. Haven't forgiven them for Air though.
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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by Mirage_GSM » Mon May 09, 2011 5:00 pm

Jaden82 wrote:Haven't forgiven them for Air though.
Yes... Seven hours of my life I'll never get back...
On the other hand I was able to trade the box in for Aria - almost the same letters, but so much better...
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Post by Leotrak » Tue May 10, 2011 4:29 am

It's almost like this board pulls decent writers towards it like moths to a flame... ">_> Srsly, the amount of decent to good to simply brilliant fics greatly outnumbers the horrifyingly bad ones O.o

I think we're setting a record here :P

So yeah, great work right here ^_^ If you like, you could have me proofread as well, I'm usually pretty good at catching typos (usually... ">_>)
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Re: Shizune's Silent Cries (ShizunexHisao) (Complete)

Post by Jaden82 » Tue May 10, 2011 9:40 am

Leotrak wrote:It's almost like this board pulls decent writers towards it like moths to a flame... ">_> Srsly, the amount of decent to good to simply brilliant fics greatly outnumbers the horrifyingly bad ones O.o
Thanks for the kind words. I really enjoyed your "Numbered Days" fanfic. Reading that along with a few other stories had me thinking that this board has some good writers and editors and it wouldn't hurt for me to post a few stories I had brewing in my head. I'm glad to see at least quite a few people enjoyed my first attempt.
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