My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by griffon8 » Sun May 08, 2011 2:07 am

PasterOfMuppets wrote:"JESUS TAKE THE WWEEEEEEEEEEL!!!"
Urg! I hate that song.
I found out about Katawa Shoujo through the forums of Misfile. There, I am the editor of Misfiled Dreams.

Completed: 100%, including bonus picture. Shizune>Emi>Lilly>Hanako>Rin

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by A1phaDrag0n » Sun May 08, 2011 2:32 am

Oh man, I'd better save this copy then in case I ruin it :? dinner's in the oven, time to get to work I suppose :)
Hanako=Rin>Lilly>Misha=Emi>Shizune

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by A1phaDrag0n » Sun May 08, 2011 3:42 am

Done! :)
Hanako=Rin>Lilly>Misha=Emi>Shizune

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by scott1and » Sun May 08, 2011 8:52 am

I like the ending better in the new version, kudos to you, brilliant work.
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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by PasterOfMuppets » Sun May 08, 2011 10:16 am

Change is good~
Good joke... Everybody laugh... Roll on snare drum... Curtains...

Hanako = Shizune = Lilly = Rin > Kenji > Placeholder > Emi

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by Jaden82 » Sun May 08, 2011 8:34 pm

PasterOfMuppets wrote:Change is good~
Indeed.

I enjoyed your story. I'm no good at inner monologues and you have a flair for that. I hope to read more from you soon.
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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by Leotrak » Tue May 10, 2011 4:08 am

This short is freakin Glorious.
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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by trekki859 » Thu May 12, 2011 7:04 pm

that. was. amazing. espicaily for your first, im not sure if there was gramor or spelling bits, if there was they werent obvious, but from my perspective, i couldint find anythign wrong with it
in the wise words of Jack O'neill ..."what?"

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by A1phaDrag0n » Fri May 13, 2011 3:54 am

Thanks for your praise, but you've only seen it after the forum helped me clean it up :lol: it's more of a joint work then my own now ;)
Hanako=Rin>Lilly>Misha=Emi>Shizune

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by Leotrak » Fri May 13, 2011 4:00 am

Eh, that's fine, everyone needs a proofreader or two to make sure no glaring errors escape your eyes :P
"ice-cream-flavoured ice-cream" -Rin
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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by PharaohSauron » Mon May 16, 2011 9:28 pm

Akio Mutou was making his way to his class, having forgotten some semi important paper work that he’d rather have done sooner then later.
I have no idea why, but I started to laugh when I read this; probably just because he treats everything as semi-important. That, and then him looking up and seeing it's about to be rainin' students. (Hallelujah! - It's raining' students! Amen!)

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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by Ar Grathnos » Tue May 17, 2011 1:00 am

Aside from the rather confusing implied time transition at the end with Nurse and one or two spelling errors, there wasn't much I could complain about. Excellent story. :mrgreen:
My order of favorites; Hanako=Lilly>=Rin>=Emi>>>>Shizune
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Re: My first Fan fiction (Hanako)

Post by A1phaDrag0n » Tue May 17, 2011 4:32 am

PharaohSauron wrote:
Akio Mutou was making his way to his class, having forgotten some semi important paper work that he’d rather have done sooner then later.
I have no idea why, but I started to laugh when I read this; probably just because he treats everything as semi-important. That, and then him looking up and seeing it's about to be rainin' students. (Hallelujah! - It's raining' students! Amen!)

I blame PasterofMuppets for putting "What is Love?" in my head, so there's some tit-for-tat.
Unfortunately, I couldn't simply have him shrug at the two falling and walk off to finish his work... sadly, that might have broken the atmosphere :lol:
Ar Grathnos wrote:Aside from the rather confusing implied time transition at the end with Nurse and one or two spelling errors, there wasn't much I could complain about. Excellent story. :mrgreen:
Thanks :D I certainly wasn't trying to hide my uncertainty over what time in recovery would have been acceptable from the nurses perspective for the two to be engaging in potentially dangerous emotional acts (for a guy that just had a heart attack)... not at all sir...
Hanako=Rin>Lilly>Misha=Emi>Shizune

"They probably think you're a furry, your signature screams it. If they don't they definitely think your a newfag..."

"... lurk moar?"

"Probably your best bet at this point..."

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