Katawa Shoujo - Pentameter style

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Re: Katawa Shoujo - Pentameter style

Post by BlackWaltzTheThird » Sat Jul 21, 2012 12:34 am

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Mirage_GSM wrote:"Calm down!" My dad tries for a soothing voice.
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Mirage_GSM wrote:"Calm down!" Father says, with a soothing voice.
Perhaps, might be a better option. Might.
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Re: Katawa Shoujo - Pentameter style

Post by Mirage_GSM » Sat Jul 21, 2012 3:19 am

Thanks, but no.
In iambic pentameter every second syllable is stressed, so that would read:

Calm down!" Father says, with a soothing voice.

Would sound strange, wouldn't it with "father" stressed on the second syllable?
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Re: Katawa Shoujo - Pentameter style

Post by BlackWaltzTheThird » Sat Jul 21, 2012 4:56 am

Oh dammit you're right. I was reading it with the stresses starting on the first syllable of each line. My bad.
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Re: Katawa Shoujo - Pentameter style

Post by The Hero Hartmut » Sun Jul 22, 2012 10:18 pm

Perhaps '"Calm down!" My father says with soothing voice'?

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