This is truly a great undertaking.
Shakespeare himself would be impressed, I think.
I enjoyed it, there is no mistaking.
But in your armour, this may be a chink.
Mirage_GSM wrote:"Calm down!" My dad tries for a soothing voice.
In my view, this line, it is not quite right.
Mirage_GSM wrote:"Calm down!" Father says, with a soothing voice.
Perhaps, might be a better option. Might.
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