Winter bells

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Winter bells

Post by Folves » Fri Oct 30, 2009 8:13 pm

Ok... well I'm pretty damn nervous about uploading this... my hands are literally shaking. So... this is my first fanwork, enjoy.

It was cold. That was my most apparent feeling at the moment, as I ran around the large track, that, as I realized just then, should only be used when it’s warm. I could hear the crunching under my feet as I jogged across the cold white substance that was causing me so much displeasure.

Stopping to catch my breath, I hear a rather louder voice than really needed coming from the other side of the track.

Emi: Are you done already, Hisao?!
Emi: Even for you that’s pretty sad!
Emi: Didn’t even make it three times around!

I groaned and stood up, she really is just like a child.

Hisao: You are aware that I have a serious heart problem, right?
Emi: You are aware that I have no legs right?
Emi: Besides, I know your heart’s much better since you’ve started running with me.
Emi: You’re just being lazy today

Damn she got me, although three times around would have been impossible when I first came here, I could do maybe three and a half on a good day now.

If I don’t do something fast, she’ll win and I’ll have to keep running. Time to use my secret weapon

Hisao: That may be so, but class is starting soon, so I have to go anyway

Worst. Secret. Weapon. Ever.

Emi considered this for a moment, looking as though she didn’t believe me.

Emi: Ok Hisao, but you better not be taking advantage of my good nature… and watch less nature

Hisao: Wouldn’t dream of it!

I yelled back as I walked away feeling triumphant, then I heard Emi shout one more thing before I was out of earshot

Emi: Ok, but if I find out you were lying, your doing laps with me in the morning and after school!

… dammit.


When I got back to my dorm, I glanced at the clock, nearly 40 minutes until class starts, looks like I have to hope Emi has a bad sense of time, or I’m running laps after school tomorrow.

Considering the time, I decided to go take a long shower. After coming out, there was about ten minutes left, so I got dressed and headed to class

There sat Misha and Shizune, looking as though they’d been waiting for me

Hisao: Oh great…

I whispered to myself, looking downcast

Feeling tense, I cautiously head to my seat, half expecting spike traps to pop out of the ground and impale me.

Misha: Oh great~? Why would you say it like that, Hicchan~?. two young women have been anxiously awaiting your arrival, you should be exited~.

At least I thought it was to myself.

Misha: You have made me very sad today, Hicchan.

She says, not looking even the least bit sad

Shizune: “…”

Misha: Shicchan says, even though you joined the art club, and betrayed two sweet young girl’s trust, you can still join the student council, if you ever decide you don’t like painting.

Hisao: Wait, trust? I don’t recall promising anything.

Misha: Wahahaha! That doesn’t matter right now Hicchan! The point is, we’re always happy to have you, no matter what!

Shizune: “…”

Misha: Even if you did pick that lazy slacker over us.

I was just about to jump in to defend Rin, but then decided it was better to just ignore that comment, I walked to my seat, and waited for class to begin.



A little while later, the bell rang signalling that it was time for lunch, so I packed up my stuff, and walked to where I usually eat lunch, the roof.

When I arrived, Emi and Rin were already here, unpacking their bento lunch boxes.

Rin: Hello Hisao.

At hearing Rin say my name, Emi glanced over, seemingly noticing me for the first time.

Emi: Hello Hisao

I could hear the contempt dripping from her voice, and before she could say anything further I…

[ ] made a break for it
[ ] sat down beside Rin and politely waited for her to finish
[ ] put her in a crushing headlock
[ ] pretended to be tree
Last edited by Folves on Fri Oct 30, 2009 11:01 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Winter bells

Post by techk8 » Fri Oct 30, 2009 9:28 pm

[X] pretended to be tree
Other then that, you should proofread your story. It's okay for me, I guess.
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Re: Winter bells

Post by SirMax » Fri Oct 30, 2009 9:56 pm

awww, there's no reason to be so scared, we don't bite. It could some proofreading/editing, and Emi seems a bit fiercer than normal, but it seems promising.
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Re: Winter bells

Post by EternalLurker » Fri Oct 30, 2009 10:26 pm

*pre-emptively stabs, in the brain, with a blunt object, anyone who dares headlock Emi*

Assuming Hisao doesn't have any lunch of his own and was relying on Emi bringing some, run for it! Otherwise, sit down beside Rin and eat calmly.

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Re: Winter bells

Post by Folves » Fri Oct 30, 2009 11:00 pm

SirMax wrote:awww, there's no reason to be so scared, we don't bite. It could some proofreading/editing, and Emi seems a bit fiercer than normal, but it seems promising.
Yeah, I decided after Emi got used to Hisao she'd be a lot more open and joking with him, just some self-styled character development.

Anyway, I guess majority vote wins for which route you take, I'll check back on sunday to see what's up with that.
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Re: Winter bells

Post by vermithrx » Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:37 am

Hmm, fun.

[x] Pretended to be a tree.

Alternatively, if you're accepting write in responses:

[x] Preemtively apologised.

He's already lost, so he might as well be gracious about it, especially with Rin right there. Who knows, it may even mollify her somewhat.

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Re: Winter bells

Post by Deimos » Sat Oct 31, 2009 6:03 am

[X] sat down beside Rin and politely waited for her to finish

Commence operation Human Shield!
vermithrx wrote:Who knows, it may even mollify her somewhat.
Should I link to a certain Molly picture? ... ... nawww, too easy! :twisted:
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Re: Winter bells

Post by vermithrx » Sat Oct 31, 2009 9:46 am

Deimos wrote:
vermithrx wrote:Who knows, it may even mollify her somewhat.
Should I link to a certain Molly picture? ... ... nawww, too easy! :twisted:
Now now, there's no need to get meretricious. :roll: Then again, she doesn't seem to be as procrustean as Shuzune. Lets hope Emi isn't either. 8)

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Re: Winter bells

Post by Folves » Sat Oct 31, 2009 1:22 pm

vermithrx wrote:
Deimos wrote:
vermithrx wrote:Who knows, it may even mollify her somewhat.
Should I link to a certain Molly picture? ... ... nawww, too easy! :twisted:
Now now, there's no need to get meretricious. :roll: Then again, she doesn't seem to be as procrustean as Shuzune. Lets hope Emi isn't either. 8)
Emi goes by the barter system.
Nothing that will ever come out of my mind will ever interest you in any way. So please, don't read this, because the twenty seconds it takes you to read this will forever haunt you. In this time you could have been looking at a rainbow, or telling someone close to you that you love them. This is not deep or thoughtful, and all it will ever amount to is words and a period.

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