[Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

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Tsundere Lightning
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[Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

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Fandom: Katawa Shoujo
Pairing: Lilly x Hisao
Tags: Lemon, Lilly, Hisao, Consensual, Foreplay, Katawa Shoujo, WAFF
Warnings: Consensual, Explicit, Foreplay, between characters with Disabilities. (But you knew that last one, or you wouldn't be here.)

Available here because it's liek 4 pages long.

Author's note:
Written for three reasons.
1: I like Lilly as a character, and though my favorites are Shizune and Rin (with Shizune and Misha dragging Hisao by the hair into the student council room as my OT3), I don't begrudge Lilly and Hisao shippers their preference. Besides, Lilly deserves some loving, whether it's from Hisao, or whoever (Wait, don't run away Hanako, I didn't mean to imply anything!)
2: Writing practice. I rely far too often on one sense (points to eyes) rather than the other four in my writing. Doing so from Lilly's point of view is actually OOC! It'll improve my writing, and I likes me a challenge.
3: FYI, I am a perv.
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Re: [Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

Post by Silentcook »

FYI, 1500+ words in one post is nothing that'd break the forum, not even close - I've been guilty of much worse myself, so you can edit your post to show them wurds directly if you like.

Finding no massive misspellings or crap terminology is enough of a breath of air for me, but I guess you have your proofies to thank for that. :3
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Re: [Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

Post by Guest »

Is there going to be more? Because I REALLY want to see where they go from there.

Props for the high quality work, good sir.
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Re: [Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

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Nicely done, sir (*looks at LJ page* wait, you're a dude right?). I like how it came out and am glad I could help.
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Re: [Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

Post by GG Crono »

I can't help but think that you could stand to insert more paragraphs. That said, good stuff. Very good. Definitely an interesting perspective for a sex scene. I like! :)
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Re: [Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

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Hmm. Interesting choice of PoV. Interesting indeed.
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Post by Super Guest Man »

I greatly enjoyed this. I feel that you accurately portrayed such a situation from Lillys perspective and kept the character feeling like the character.
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Re: [Lilly, pr0n] Touch, Sound, Taste and Smell

Post by Deimos »

At one point four lines are beginning with the word "I" - well, other than that you did quite well.
Your RPG skills in character building should come in handy if you ever decide to write something not entirely pornographic.
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