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Galaxie's oneshots/contest entries

Post by emi » Sat Oct 26, 2019 11:20 pm

I apologize in advance for any errors I may make in these posts.

My prompt for this contest was the pairing of Lilly and Hanako encountering a medical emergency/nurse's office visit.



A Hairy Situation

The cloudy sky darkens as the evening sun disappears behind the horizon. Lilly and Hanako exit the Shanghai, arms locked, as they begin walking up the hill making small talk. “Lilly? Do you think Hi-Hisao will want to c-come with us next time?”

Lilly gives a slight smile as she ponders. “I certainly hope so, he’s interesting, isn’t he?”

Hanako thinks back to what happened in the library when they met. “Yeah, he is.” Hanako suddenly freezes in her tracks.

“Hanako, what is it?”

“Th-there’s a doggie up ahead, a b-big one.”

“Oh, is it approaching us?”

“He's coming this w-way.” Hanako clutches Lilly’s arm tighter as they get closer.

“Well if it's just a dog, I’m sure it will be fine, Hanako.” The large animal struts up to Hanako, sniffing her over. Hanako yelps out as its nose touches her. It suddenly snarls and leaps onto Hanako, who lets out a bloodcurdling scream as she is tackled to the ground. Lilly falls down as well and loses grasp of her cane.

The wolf tears at Hanako’s shoulder as she continues shrieking in pain. Lilly feels around for her cane, picking it up and nervously tries to swipe at the wolf, listening to the growling to pinpoint the location. She swoops down with a heavy whack as the hit connects with its neck and it whimpers, releasing its hold on Hanako. The wolf scurries away as Lilly rushes to help her friend.

“Are you hurt? Do I need to get help?” Hanako doesn’t respond, having fainted from shock. “Hanako? Oh dear, I’ll call an ambulance!” Lilly reaches into her bag to pull out her phone, dialing the emergency number and explaining what happened. Shortly after, sirens can be heard in the distance as an ambulance makes it way closer. Hanako is taken to the hospital and treated while Lilly is returned to the dorms. She has trouble sleeping that night, hoping the best for Hanako.

The next day goes by slowly as Lilly spends the whole day worrying. Lilly eventually gets word that Hanako was released into the school nurse’s care around noon, and makes her way to the medical wing. She approaches the door and hears the nurse talking on the other side. “You’re very lucky Hanako, the bite didn’t tear anything major and the injury is healing rather quickly. The rabies shot also came back negative.. We’ll monitor you for a few more hours and then you can go home.”

Lilly knocks on the door and it opens. “Come in! Ah, Miss Satou, I understand you were with her last night?”

“Yes, it happened so quickly, I didn’t really know what was going on until we were already being attacked.. How is Hanako?”

“She’s doing well considering the circumstances of last night. You may have saved her life, Lilly.” She smiles, relieved as she approaches the bed with her hand out.

Hanako grabs it and speaks up with some straining. “Thanks, Li-Lilly. I was so s-scared, I thought I was never going to w-wake up.”

Lilly grasps Hanako’s hand with both of her own. “I’m just glad you’re alright. You don’t have to worry anymore; I gave it a good beating. Get some rest, and swing by my room when you can, I have to run some errands.”

“O-okay I will.” Hanako says as Lilly stands up and exits.

Hanako is let go several hours later, and makes her way to the dorms. She changes into her pajamas then knocks on Lilly’s room and hears some shuffling inside. “Come in Hanako!” Lilly says. Hanako opens the door, walking in.

Hisao waves. “Hey, Hanako.” Unsuspecting of extra company, Hanako is flustered that Hisao sees her like this, as she screams in surprise.

“Eeeeeeep! H-Hisao!” Hanako covers her face and tries to hide behind Lilly.

Hisao looks surprised himself and stumbles trying to calm her down. “Sorry, I didn’t mean to startle you, Uh, you look nice. I mean-”

Hanako shakes her head as she responds. “N-no, it’s okay. I just d-didn’t expect anyone. T-thanks.” Hanako blushes, then glances around the room and notices board games, food and drinks laid out.

Sensing the pause, Lilly explains. “I thought we could all have a relaxing evening together playing games, so I asked Hisao to come over and help set up. We brought all your favorite snacks too!”

Hanako gives Lilly a hug, understanding that they’re trying to take her mind off of the incident. “Okay, t-that sounds fun.”

Hisao pulls out a bottle of wine from behind him and places it between them, smirking. “This might help too.”

Hanako's mouth opens in shock. “Where’d y-you get that?”

“I know someone.” Hisao grins.

Lilly feels for and picks up the bottle, a smile appearing on her face. “Oh my! Hisao you delinquent. Well it would be a waste not to drink it after you went through the trouble of bringing it here. Isn’t that right Hanako?”

“Um, y-yes? Right. Yes.” Hanako seems to reassure herself mid sentence. They open the bottle and spend the next few hours drinking and playing games as the sun sets and the moonlight takes its place in the clouded sky.
While Hanako and Hisao are playing a game of chess, Lilly excuses herself to go to the restroom. After placing his piece, Hisao gazes over at Hanako, then stares intently at her face. Hanako looks flustered and puts her hand up to cover it as she stutters. “W-what is it?”

“I never realized you were so beautiful, Hanako. What are you hiding?”

She blushes even more and tries to explain. “I’m not p-pretty. These scars are proof of t-that.”

Hisao tries to get a closer look, a puzzled look encasing his face once he does. “Are you wearing makeup to hide it? I can barely see them.”

“What? No!” She rubs her hand on her cheek and the roughness is barely there. She pulls up her sleeve to reveal similar results on her arm, with the discoloration almost unapparent. “What is this? I don’t understand.” Hanako questions herself as the gears turn in her head. Hisao drunkenly leans close to her and murmurs.

“Hey. Don’t worry about it. Scars or not, you’re perfect.” Hisao goes in and starts kissing her. Their lips meet, and Hanako is overwhelmed with conflicting emotions as the glow of the full moon bleeds through the window. She doesn’t pull away immediately though, she didn’t expect her first kiss would be like this. Hanako suddenly feels a warm fuzzy feeling flowing through her. Hisao abruptly winces out. “Ouch, Hanako, you’re digging into my back.” He pulls away and notices something odd as he rubs a puncture in his lip. “You have really sharp teeth too.”

Hanako looks down and notices the fur growing on her arms. “All the b-better to eat y-you with, my dear Hisao.”
Last edited by emi on Sun Oct 27, 2019 3:49 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Emi > Misha > Miki > Suzu > Lilly > Hanako > Rika > Saki > Rin > Shizune
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Re: Galaxie's oneshots/contest entries

Post by brythain » Sun Oct 27, 2019 3:58 am

This is truly a shaggy-dog story. Would love if you could separate the lines—easier to read. :)
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Re: Galaxie's oneshots/contest entries

Post by Hanako Fancopter » Sun Oct 27, 2019 2:09 pm

This one was clever. I write Evil Lilly, you wrote Evil Hanako
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Re: Galaxie's oneshots/contest entries

Post by emi » Sun Oct 27, 2019 3:50 pm

brythain wrote:
Sun Oct 27, 2019 3:58 am
This is truly a shaggy-dog story. Would love if you could separate the lines—easier to read. :)
Added line spacing c:
Emi > Misha > Miki > Suzu > Lilly > Hanako > Rika > Saki > Rin > Shizune
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Re: Galaxie's oneshots/contest entries

Post by Mirage_GSM » Thu Oct 31, 2019 12:44 pm

Not quite a dream this time... I think?
Again, this is probably due to a word limit of this contest, but the story felt very disjointed in several places when you glossed over events with just a half sentence. It could certainly use some fleshing-out.
Other than that a nice read.
Emi > Misha > Hanako > Lilly > Rin > Shizune

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