Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route

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Re: Switching Dynamics - A Ritsu Pseudo-Route

Post by Razoredge » Fri Oct 04, 2019 6:16 am

As ProfAllister said, I'm not found of the rewriting of the first scenes from the game. Maybe you did for a specific purpose, it's up to you, but I'm honest, the start is not my cup of tea. However, the other scenes, in my point of view, are good. I have noticed the same issues with the plot, but I'm sure you'll find a way to improve it.

And as Mirage said, yeah, the story improved a lot when you stopped to rewrite the VN scenes, and that's a good thing. Keep it up, you can do a really nice little thing.
Lilly = Akira > Miki = Hanako > Emi > Rin > Shizune

Stuff I'm currently writing : Beyond the haze : A Lilly Satou pseudo-route & Razor's One Shots & misc.

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