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Since the story itself is beyond reproach as usual let me nitpick a bit

“I still need to breath,” I gasp.

breathe

On one wall is a small rack contain various medals

containing

I'm going to b really mad at you.

Other than that mostly punctuation issues...
Looking forward to seeing where this is going, though at the current pace we'll probably have to wait till next year to read the conclusion...