Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

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Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Post by Mineoa » Fri Jan 04, 2019 11:59 am

Thank you Crud. That wasn't what I was expecting and cought me completely off guard. That was a wonderful story and honestly I felt like I was about to cry when i realized it was Hisao. I mean, that caught me REALLY off guard. I really appreciate the story. It was fantastic.
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Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Post by Zerebos » Fri Jan 04, 2019 4:10 pm

Pablo, that is not at all the set of characters I expected with that prompt, but that's a good thing. I actually really liked the cast you chose and how you brought them together. Kenji stories like this are always hilarious and this is no exception. I think your characterization of him was pretty good for most of it, he just seemed a bit *too* receptive to being with Misha and Shizune. But him being too much of a dolt to realize she's deaf was perfect :lol:

All in all, I really enjoyed this, it was really unique. Thanks Pabs!

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"What's this? What's this? There's something very wrong!~"

Post by LordDarknus » Thu Jan 10, 2019 6:29 am

cpl_crud wrote:
Mon Dec 31, 2018 4:46 am
Scare yourself awake. Breathe in. Pee. Sleep again.
That's hilarious.

cpl_crud wrote:
Mon Dec 31, 2018 4:46 am
I kind of bastardized the request,

[...]

The request was:
Can I have my prompt be that Hanako has been getting presents lately from someone but she doesn't know who, but one day she walks into her room early and there's like two or three skeletons dressed up as santa clause and they're putting presents in her room? I just want the secret santa to be a couple of festive skelleton dudes. Otherwise the story can be anything.
I took the "...story can be anything..." route. I wanted to make it scary but I don't know how to.
Dude, what, come on, you never heard of Captain Jack Sparrow Santa Jack Skellington?

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I wanted Jack Skellington to take Hanako to Christmas Town or something... :cry:

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Re: "What's this? What's this? There's something very wrong!~"

Post by cpl_crud » Thu Jan 10, 2019 8:14 am

LordDarknus wrote:
Thu Jan 10, 2019 6:29 am
cpl_crud wrote:
Mon Dec 31, 2018 4:46 am
Scare yourself awake. Breathe in. Pee. Sleep again.
That's hilarious.

cpl_crud wrote:
Mon Dec 31, 2018 4:46 am
I kind of bastardized the request,

[...]

The request was:
Can I have my prompt be that Hanako has been getting presents lately from someone but she doesn't know who, but one day she walks into her room early and there's like two or three skeletons dressed up as santa clause and they're putting presents in her room? I just want the secret santa to be a couple of festive skelleton dudes. Otherwise the story can be anything.
I took the "...story can be anything..." route. I wanted to make it scary but I don't know how to.
Dude, what, come on, you never heard of Captain Jack Sparrow Santa Jack Skellington?

Image

I wanted Jack Skellington to take Hanako to Christmas Town or something... :cry:
Yeah, I have to admit that I'm not up to date on Mr Skeletal references, or any jolly skeletons.

It might be a bit of bias, but I don't see "happy and jolly" as really a Hanako thing. But maybe I'm just too cynical...!

As for the reaction to a night terror, I have to admit that I may have done some unnecessary self-insertion there.
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Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Post by Mirage_GSM » Sat Jan 12, 2019 11:58 am

Well, at first I thought Hanako was getting a visit by the ghosts of Christmas past, present and future...
Now that would actually make for an interesting story... though maybe better with Hisao being the one visited...
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Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Post by ProfAllister » Sat Jan 19, 2019 10:43 am

ProfAllister wrote:
Sun Dec 23, 2018 11:43 am
Onsen a Lifetime
Nice story, but, umm... what's with all the Airplane! references?
NoticeMeOppai wrote:
Mon Dec 24, 2018 7:18 pm
Rooftop Repartee
Similar to Mirage, it's a nice story, but it's kinda sad to see (serious) depictions of Nomiya as the resident creep. Fun and goofy depictions are enjoyable for a laugh, but serious writing in that direction is just low-hanging fruit.
Scroff wrote:
Tue Dec 25, 2018 5:43 am
All I want for Christmas...
Cute story, lots of fun, and reasonably well-written. Some word repetition, and I'll admit that I'm not the biggest fan of third person present tense stories, but that's mostly a personal preference.
BristerXD wrote:
Wed Dec 26, 2018 2:51 am
Holiday Hunger Humbug
An extremely strong showing for a first post. Looking forward to seeing more. That being said, I'd advise against going for radio silence until you're ready to post. Commenting on fics and getting involved in the community will make it easier to commit to sticking with writing and eventually posting your story.
Vekter wrote:
Sat Dec 29, 2018 11:42 am
A Silent Jive under Miseltoe and Snow
As already said, short and sweet. A repetition of "seem interesting", and I'm personally a fan of avoiding name drops when making outside references, but those are little nitpicks. A quiet breath between moments can be very refreshing indeed.
cpl_crud wrote:
Mon Dec 31, 2018 4:46 am
[Untitled Self-Portrait #9](If you don't give your story a title, I'm gonna do it for you :p )

"Scary Ghost Stories" is one of the Christmas traditions that's been somewhat forgotten in recent years, so nice to see it come back. And I'm sure I speak for everyone when I say that it's a bit of an honor for you to participate this year. A quiet, melancholic story is nice, and something hard to get right, so hats off to you. I'll admit that I find it a little odd that Hanako's Father is taller than Hisao (One of the tallest characters in KS), but I guess it isn't outside the realm of possibility.
PabloPabloPablo wrote:
Tue Jan 01, 2019 3:31 am
Kenji Survives the Christmas Apocalypse
Very nicely done, and a fun twist on the prompt given. One bit jumps out at me, though: I don't think it's especially accurate to describe Shizune as Misha's protege...

(Outside submissions will be addressed in their own threads (when completed))

... And that essentially wraps it up for this year. We have a few late submissions, but my understanding is that the recipients have been contacted, and the late submissions will be forthcoming... eventually. The good news is that I've got semi-reliable methods of contacting the remaining writers, so I'll at least have a way to know whether I should mobilise the backup writers. Hopefully, we'll get all our submissions in before July this year.

As today is the Theophany (according to the Julian Calendar), we're pretty much at the last day of the Christmas season, even by the standards of the most extreme revelers (who have a legalistic basis). So This is the formal close of ceremonies, with a big "thank you" to everyone who participated. with any luck, we can look forward to something similar next Christmas!
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Re: Secret Santa 2018 - Story collection

Post by Mirage_GSM » Tue Feb 19, 2019 12:28 pm

Added the latest submission by Scrathminus to the index.

With this there should be four stories still missing - plus one or two that are still in progress.

@ProfAllister are you going to give those four to other writers so Craftyatom, Vekter, BristerXD and PabloPabloPablo also get their prompts written?
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