Hanako's New Hat

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Hanako's New Hat

Post by LordDarknus » Sun Aug 12, 2018 6:52 pm

"Umm... Hanako? I've been meaning to ask you...."

"Y-Yes?" she looks up at me as I ask.

"About your new... err, that is... your..."

With a puzzled look on her face, she tilts her head, despite the immense weight on it; and she asks, "You... you mean m-my new hat?"

"Err... yeah."

There's no one else to witness this somewhat awkward conversation, given that we're in Hanako's room together, reading the latest Zemlya Conspiracy books. Well... her reading them, and me mostly just watching her read. Under that new "hat".

"W-What about my new hat?"

"Well, Hanako...." -- How should I put this? -- "Your new hat... it's... it's...."

"It's... what, Hisao?"

"It's a big, iridescent, multiple-eyed monster snake, with its huge maw clamped firmly on your head."

The monster snake instantly turns every one of its bloody, red eyes to glare maliciously at me. Apparently it's capable of understanding words, and was also reading the new Zemlya book in Hanako's hands, The Zemlya Confederacy, pretty intently.

"It-It isn't very firm..." Hanako says, adjusting the snake's grip on her head.

"Are you sure? Because it looks kind of painful."

"N-No, it doesn't hurt," she says as the monster snake starts to growl. "Lucida is... my friend. She wouldn't hurt me."

"Your... "friend"? ... "Lucida"?"

"Y-Y-Yes... that-that's her name... I named her that...." she says quietly. The monster snake begins to hiss fiercely at me. Does it think I'm upsetting Hanako?

"I see..." I speak carefully. "Where did you find the monster- err, I mean, Lucida?"

"At a fashion store," Hanako meekly replies.

"How... what?"

"At a... fashion store," Hanako says again, slightly less timidly. "Th-They also sell, beetle brooches there too...."

"Really? You mean, umm... jewellery that are shaped like beetles?"

"N-No... they s-s-sell live beetles, b-but with, jewellery glued onto them."

A brief, awkward silence passes between us, with the monster snake keeping its murderous gaze on me.

"Why would-"

"They were also selling a bejewelled Giant Madagascar Hissing Cockroach, which... which isn't a beetle."

"Umm... yeah... I... I guess it isn't."

Hanako slowly looks back down at her book, visibly upset. The monster snake looks like it's about ready to leap at me and attack. Quickly, I try to cheer Hanako up:

"Umm.... Not unless you name it Ringo Starr!"

"Huh?" Hanako looks at me, obviously not understanding.

"Or, Paul McCartney? You know? The Beatles?"

"Oh... right," Hanako says and nods, getting my joke. But she doesn't smile. The monster snake opens its jaws, detaching itself from her head.

"So umm... I guess your pet monster- err, Giant Sparkly Hissing Snake is err, a real head-turner of a hat, huh?"

"Mmm-hmm," Hanako agrees, nodding once. The monster comes slithering towards me, deliberately taking its time.

"So, she's a... Lucida's a tame, Snake-Hat, right? She won't bite?" I ask with a trembling voice.

"Well, she's a Rainbow Serpent... so... she doesn't harm girls...."

The monster snake stops its approach right before me, and raises its horrible head and neck to a stand; it fixes all of its angry, terrible eyes on me.

"What- What about boys, Hanako?"

"I-I don't know, i-it depends," Hanako says, "do you... d-d-do you...."

"Do I what, Hanako?"

"Y-You know... menstruate....?"

"What? NO!"

"Well, then.... I think Lucida might swallow you."

"WHAT?"

The monster snake opens its mouth at me, its three jaws widening into a maw of sharp teeth and moist red flesh, evoking a... particular resemblance to... umm... a certain anatomical feature unique to the female body, a... big, wet, Freudian imagery, like... ummm, like seeing a glimpse of the dark abyss of hell in the open mouth of a Black Mamba.

The monster's open mouth looks like Vagina Dentata, okay?!

"Hanako!"

"B-But don't worry, Hisao! It's okay! Lucida will vomit you back out again!"

"How is that oka-"

Before I can finish, the monster has already bitten and swallowed me whole. I swiftly lose consciousness as the beast works its curved teeth on my limbs and body, forcing me down its fetid gullet.

The last thoughts I have... are regrets....

And a vision... of blood... my own blood... trickling down Hanako's hand... as she once again, puts on her new hat.



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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by Imperial_Sheep » Sun Aug 12, 2018 9:49 pm

Umm..... that was weird. And creepy. If this was meant to be horror, it succeeded rather well.

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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by Oddball » Mon Aug 13, 2018 12:33 pm

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... oookay... really don't know what you were going for on this one. or WHY it exists.

Or why you felt the need to have the spoiler tag right in the middle of your story...

Or anything about the story, really.

I'm just ... confused.

I like the picture though. Nice and creepy.
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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by psyxypher » Mon Aug 13, 2018 8:38 pm

Not sure how to respond.

Oddly enough, I recently imagined Hanako as a mutant with four prehensile tongues and external versions of skull, ribcage, spine and pelvis. I think that's related enough.
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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by WorldlyWiseman » Mon Aug 13, 2018 10:58 pm

Neat! This builds up to its climax at a good pace and the narrator's discomfort with the hat adds some dark comedy.

The introduction of the snake hat feels more absurd than shocking or frightening. I think it's a combination of the narrator being really specific about the books Hanako is reading, as though that specific detail would even stand out at that moment, and the indication that Hanako's had this hat for some time and he's only now broaching the subject.

'Many-eyed' would be a better descriptor than 'multiple-eyed'. Avoiding a direct description altogether might allow the piece to lean closer to horror, just ascribing snake-like actions to the hat or having the narrator's questions be so hesitant and beating-around-the-bush that the reader can only conclude that the hat is indeed a snake.

You don't need that spoiler tag or the text it covers.

I'd guess you were pretty literally inspired by that promo art for crud's new project and got to writing right away. I wouldn't have known without this, so thanks!
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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by sloth4 » Tue Aug 14, 2018 1:38 pm

I'm not sure what to think about this. It's very short, but also very unique. Might be good as a one-shot comic.

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WorldlyWiseman wrote:
Mon Aug 13, 2018 10:58 pm
I'd guess you were pretty literally inspired by that promo art for crud's new project and got to writing right away. I wouldn't have known without this, so thanks!
What is this, exactly? I couldn't find anything when I searched online.

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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by WorldlyWiseman » Thu Aug 16, 2018 12:23 am

sloth4 wrote:
Tue Aug 14, 2018 1:38 pm
What is this, exactly? I couldn't find anything when I searched online.
There's a link to crud's blog right below the picture above. I am assuming that the picture is related.
Hanako's favorite joke is The Aristocrats, but she never tells it because Lilly finds it really offensive. Instead, she practices her delivery in front of a mirror when she's alone. It's the only time she never stammers.

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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by Oddball » Thu Aug 16, 2018 3:45 am

You have to follow a link from crud's blog to another blog to find the original picture.
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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by Mirage_GSM » Wed Aug 22, 2018 6:03 am

That was... Actually about what I was expecting from you :-)

As for Crud's new project...
Funny in his blog he says he won't go into details because he doesn't want to repeat stuff on the project page and then he continues to give more details than can be found on the project page - which isn't saying much, though.
It's probably not for me. Usually excessive violence and gore are red flags for me, and the artwork makes me very wary in that regard.
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Re: Hanako's New Hat

Post by cpl_crud » Sun Aug 26, 2018 12:07 am

Mirage_GSM wrote:
Wed Aug 22, 2018 6:03 am
That was... Actually about what I was expecting from you :-)

As for Crud's new project...
Funny in his blog he says he won't go into details because he doesn't want to repeat stuff on the project page and then he continues to give more details than can be found on the project page - which isn't saying much, though.
It's probably not for me. Usually excessive violence and gore are red flags for me, and the artwork makes me very wary in that regard.
I'm planning to give more details on the official blog but I'm officially lazy and haven't done anything yet.
There shouldn't be excessive gore. Only some gore.
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