Flutter - Level Thirty Five: Chip Damage [1/3/24]

[TubaMirum]

Indeed, very much Slice of Life but...

Rika and Hisao used Kiss!

A critical hit!

It's super effective!

FATALITY

[Hesmiyu]

Indeed, very much Slice of Life but...

Rika and Hisao used Kiss!

A critical hit!

It's super effective!

FATALITY

With their conditions, it actually could be

[Dash9]

I always notice your posts JUST as I'm about to go to sleep.
EVERY.
SINGLE.
TIME!!!

The reunion scene was a *tiny* bit less awkward than I expected. I do get the reasoning behind it I think, but Hisao is such a horribly awkward character it was just a tiny stretch. Especially when he brushed off the comments and stumbles his friends made regarding his condition. Same thing with his reaction to the shopkeeper, it does make sense but it seems ever so slightly OOC. He's always been REALLY sensitive about it, I kinda imagined there would be some degree of mixed reaction to his hometown's greetings.

and Hisao’s story become fewer as

typo?

Anyway, even with the inconsistencies with my personal headcanon (my problem, not yours), I LOVED this chapter. The setting for the kiss was especially perfect, and her reaction was just as adorable as ever. I think you did a phenomenal job with subtly showing how natural it felt to both of them, and how comfortable they are with each other. I know very little about the art of writing a story, but the 'show, don't tell' philosophy seems to be a really hard thing for people to master. Major respect to you for how much you were able to convey in that scene.

Fantastic work, keep it up! Now I can't wait to see the next chapter when Rika actually faces off against a worthy opponent and Hisao shows off HIS arcade skills.
(crossing my fingers for a 'light-gun' style game where Hisao is the one who carries the game) [MAN I miss the old 'Area 51' machine they used to have at the theater xD]

As always, thanks for sharing,
--Dash

[swampie2]

It's a good thing I still get free dentist appointments, you're giving my cavities left and right sharp.

[Sharp-O]

Thanks for all the feedback, guys! I'm a little bummed that no one has made mention of the Hisao sprite since I think it's one of the best I've done (plus how many Hisao sprites, official or not, out there? Exactly).

Hisao's more laidback approach to his heart

This is intentional on my part. Rika revealed her condition fairly early on, becoming an unintended example that Hisao could lead a normal life with his. Unlike other routes, I imagine Rika (any Rika, in theory) would be a good influence on the medical/psychological side of things and while Hisao isn't about to make light of his heart, he's still not entirely comfortable with it and certain events will exacerbate that.

[Dash9]

Thanks for all the feedback, guys! I'm a little bummed that no one has made mention of the Hisao sprite since I think it's one of the best I've done (plus how many Hisao sprites, official or not, out there? Exactly).

Oops, I guess it's one of those things that's I just took a little bit for granted, but it really did come out great. In all honesty, I think it just got eclipsed by the kiss (where's THAT artwork from btw?). I can't remember if I've mentioned it before or not, but it is REALLY nice how much effort you put into giving us visual cues to help us follow along your stories.

thanks again,
--Dash

[Texaboose]

I can't remember if I've mentioned it before or not, but it is REALLY nice how much effort you put into giving us visual cues to help us follow along your stories.

Gotta reinforce Dash on this - love the visuals that go with your work. Fun chapter to read as always, although glad you confirmed that Hisao's attitude about his heart was intentional, and explained the reasoning behind it.
I enjoy your take on Mei and Takumi, two more characters that are rarely explored. However, gotta admit, Leafy's impression of Mei has stuck in my head (probably because it was my first introduction to Mei), and it was a bit jarring reading the totally two different takes on this blank character. Not your fault, totally mine.

Looking forward to the upcoming duel. Hopefully there's no Fatalities.

[Mirage_GSM]

Hopefully there's no Fatalities.

If they are playing Mortal Kombat - there will be!

[Sharp-O]

Hopefully there's no Fatalities.

If they are playing Mortal Kombat - there will be!

The next chapter is called "Test Your Might"

[AlexFDSR]

Crapbaskets

Huh, she says that too.

[TubaMirum]

Crapbaskets

Huh, she says that too.

Could it be argued that she's actually the progenitor of this statement given we're in 2007?

[AlexFDSR]

Crapbaskets

Huh, she says that too.

Could it be argued that she's actually the progenitor of this statement given we're in 2007?

Excellent point.

[Sharp-O]

Crapbaskets

Huh, she says that too.

Could it be argued that she's actually the progenitor of this statement given we're in 2007?

It could be argued; due to the cyclical nature of the universe, life, and jokes. Plus I'd love to hear Rin say:
"Timeline? Time isn't made out of lines... It is made out of circles. That is why clocks are round, Hisao."

[Texaboose]

"Timeline? Time isn't made out of lines... It is made out of circles. That is why clocks are round, Hisao."

Can just see the crossover now:
Emi after a 'conversation' with Shizune

"Uh, she was just talking about everyone here, how you're all idiots and jerks, but you guys are her idiots and jerks, that if I tried to become more popular than her she would talk about me behind my back and turn everyone against me, and then I would cry and everybody would hate me. You know, girl stuff!"

[AlexFDSR]

It could be argued; due to the cyclical nature of the universe, life, and jokes. Plus I'd love to hear Rin say:
"Timeline? Time isn't made out of lines... It is made out of circles. That is why clocks are round, Hisao."

That's the sassiest thing Rin has ever said.