Yamaku Book Club (20210719 Kotani's Agency for finding things)

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20210628 Hisao & Akira Avoid The Family)

Post by Razoredge » Wed Jul 07, 2021 12:48 pm

I... wasn't ready for that. I expected litterally ANYTHING but that. It's a very well-written piece, and I didn't expect anything else from FluffandCrunch. The last lines are pretty well done, and it got me, I didn't expect that, to be honest. That was a very well done turn of events, and I have to bring him/her credit for that. That's a bitter ending, for sure, but a very well done one. I never read it before, and I know, it's a shame. But, that was a great reading for me, I was surprised by the ending, in the good way, so, yeah, an absolute great piece of writing.
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (Kotani's Agency for finding things)

Post by Oddball » Fri Jul 16, 2021 8:46 am

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Kotani's Agency for finding things by Ario.

There sure are a lot of detective stories set in KS. Unlike certain other fics though, this one doesn't do anything to break canon or even the mood set by the main game (unless you count Kenji's set-up here but you could argue that Kenji breaks the mood even in the game.)

This is still a little slice of life set in Yamaku. It just features a student that fancies himself a detective. Kotani might be a little too perfect and a little too "based on the author" but it's nothing horrible. It's just a light soft enjoyable story with a few cute moments here and there.

Also, this story steals one of my ideas. It was a bit odd seeing it here, but I don't mind.
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20210719 Kotani's Agency for finding things)

Post by Razoredge » Tue Jul 20, 2021 10:00 am

To be fair, I'm kinda picky when it comes to detective stories. But this one was an enjoyable reading so far. The slice of life elements and the general mood helped a lot, I have to say. I really don't mind if the OC is a self-insert, or if the writer has put a lot of himself/herself in the character, it's not badly made, so I can't complain about it. I would say that three conditions for the same character is a little bit too much, but as someone who made a two conditions character, I have nothing to say. The writing is really enjoyable though, it's a nice little piece, but it feels like it's not finished. This whole thing would have deserved to have other parts and a proper ending thing, but hey, I guess we'll never have the ending.

So, yeah, this thing is a really enjoyable piece of writing, I liked it.
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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20210719 Kotani's Agency for finding things)

Post by belCavendishNY » Wed Jul 21, 2021 5:59 pm

This was a cute little piece. I wouldn't call it a great mystery, but that's alright with me. It's a pity the author hasn't been heard from in eight years; it'd be nice to see a continuation of some kind and making one without permission is frowned upon.

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Re: Yamaku Book Club (20210719 Kotani's Agency for finding things)

Post by brythain » Wed Jul 21, 2021 10:08 pm

belCavendishNY wrote:
Wed Jul 21, 2021 5:59 pm
… it'd be nice to see a continuation of some kind and making one without permission is frowned upon.
You can start a new thread with your own continuation; I don't think people frown upon it as long as your intentions are clear and you credit the original writer. There are a fair number of those around if you look hard enough.

(Note: this is a statement of possible process, not a request.)
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Main Index (Complete)Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/AkiraHideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of SuzuSakura—The Kenji Saga.
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