Hanako & Hisao at the arcade

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Hanako & Hisao at the arcade

Post by NekoNutchi » Fri Sep 06, 2013 12:12 pm

Inspired by the fanfic Sisterhood, http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t=6750, specifically chapter 8.

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Re: Hanako & Hisao at the arcade

Post by Sea » Sun Sep 08, 2013 8:15 am

Hisao looks rather feminine today. Also, the scar tissue extends down to Hanako's hand, not terminating at her forearm. Otherwise, good job!
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Post by Guest Poster » Mon Sep 09, 2013 11:29 am

Neat. :)
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Post by NekoNutchi » Mon Sep 09, 2013 12:30 pm

Sea wrote:Hisao looks rather feminine today. Also, the scar tissue extends down to Hanako's hand, not terminating at her forearm. Otherwise, good job!
Good points, i will keep that in mind. Any tips how i could make Hisao look less "feminine"?

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Post by Oddball » Mon Sep 09, 2013 1:35 pm

Any tips how i could make Hisao look less "feminine"?
For one, I'd trim the hair a bit. It's a tad too long. I'd also suggest shrinking the eyes slightly and making the mouth and noise longer, as well as making the head a bit less round.
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Post by NekoNutchi » Wed Sep 11, 2013 4:46 pm

...WIP Hisao's face:
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Currently having difficulties in placing the eyes right without making him look angry.
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Re: Hanako & Hisao at the arcade

Post by Sea » Fri Sep 13, 2013 7:05 am

NekoNutchi wrote:...WIP Hisao's face:
http://i.imgur.com/TKsLgIY.png?1
Currently having difficulties in placing the eyes right without making him look angry.
It's better, but the hair was one of the main things for me.
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Re: Hanako & Hisao at the arcade

Post by Dream » Thu Sep 19, 2013 1:00 pm

Off the top of my head, you might want to pronounce bone structure further if you want a more masculine head.

Also, given anime's love of lineplay, you might want to use bolder, straighter lines for a masculine face, too.
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Post by NekoNutchi » Fri Sep 20, 2013 4:27 pm

Update:
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And here's the entire image, but here the change appears more subtle, if at all.
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Re: Hanako & Hisao at the arcade

Post by Sea » Mon Oct 14, 2013 11:25 pm

NekoNutchi wrote:Update:
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And here's the entire image, but here the change appears more subtle, if at all.
http://th02.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2 ... 6kvzhl.jpg
Expand the mouth, it's way out of proportion
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Post by SpunkySix » Mon Feb 17, 2014 9:21 am

Not so much advice, just wanted to say that the concept for this is super cute.
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Post by Woody Alien » Tue Dec 09, 2014 12:32 pm

It's adorable. I haven't read the fanfiction btw.
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Re: Hanako & Hisao at the arcade

Post by emmjay » Thu Dec 11, 2014 7:11 am

At first I thought Hanako looked a little glassy-eyed, but then I took a second look and noticed the tilt of her eyes. That's not glassy-eyed, that's her focusing-intently-on-the-game look. Nice work.
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