ProfAllister wrote:Well, I didn't really express it in my last response, but I am flattered beyond words that you consider my fanfic worth the effort of taking on a project of this scale. It really is quite stunning.
As for the drawings themselves, they're quite good, if a little rough at certain points.
Page 2: Misha's smile looks a little more like a grimace. Also, I almost think it would make more sense for her to use her right hand.
Page 3: The poke looks like it's hurting Misha, not Hisao. Poke someone (or yourself) for reference. The finger stays straight. It looks like Misha's breaking her finger.
Page 4: Have to agree with Hisao on that bottom panel - wow. It looks like everything went all fisheye lens for a moment there. I'm guessing that's the sort of thing you were talking about with your "perspective skills" comment.
Page 5: The "Student Council" pose is cute. Can't really complain about this page. The foot fetishist in me can't help but point out that it looks like Shizune is wearing loafers rather than her iconic Mary Janes (with roses).
Page 6: More weirdness with perspective. The food shot seems to be fisheyed again.
Page 7: Mostly good, but things get weird with perspective again.
Overall, it's very good, but your vanishing points seem to be all over the place, which really messes with the perspective, giving certain shots an extremely surreal quality.
A little disappointed to hear that we won't see anything more until I finish writing (I guess that's supposed to be an incentive for me to speed up, huh? :p). No idea what your pace is, but you may want to consider getting on top of it sooner rather than later, since we're maybe as much as halfway through and my pace dropped dramatically after the new year rolled in, so the ending will (unfortunately) be more likely than not a long time coming.
As far as the possibility of rewrites, there's nothing planned at the moment. I may revisit the chapters once it's all done and archive old versions as I rewrite/clean up new ones, but that's looking very far down the road. I can guarantee that I have no intention of any sort of rewrites before I finish the first run. Also, on your deviantart page, you mention "bulky parts." Care to elaborate? I always welcome feedback, especially when it's suggestions on how I might improve.
Anyway, happy to know that my work has inspired you, and really looking forward to seeing more.
Hah! Now that's what I'm talking about!
Okay, I'mma respond to all of these. Give me a sec.
First off, I apologize for the quality. I'm still using the traditional method. Not an excuse, but when the drawings get scanned, I have to adjust contrast and stuff. It really affects the un-edited drawing itself, so yeah.
Second, thanks for taking the time to post!
Page 02: Yes, I intended her smile to look like a grimace. Those two tend to gang up on Hisao whenever possible so I tried for a friendly grimace. Haha! That's why I also included Shizune in the panels. A hint for the readers that they're planning to bug Hisao again.
About Misha's hand.. well she is sitting to the right of Hisao. Since they were still in class, I figured she would use her left hand for subtlety.
Page 03: Ah, now that you mention it, I cannot unsee it. It was for comedic purposes though. Like the speed of Misha's poke crashing into the ribs of Hisao. I did try to check hours ago about how the finger would really look like. Either the middle joint would be bent upward (like how I drew it) or downward (normally).
Page 04: When I was doing this page, the idea of "experimenting" with perspective came to mind (thus the fisheye). Will continue to work on that.
Page 05: Gonna look into their stuff a little bit more. Haha!
Page 06: Yes, experimented with that one.
Page 07: This as well.
I played around with the perspectives in these teasers for the heck of it. Now that you've mentioned these, I feel bad. I did try my best to make the pages look more dynamic even when they were just sitting or standing (hence the weird views). KS doesn't exactly have the action-y bits you normally see in other stories. I wanted to give the reader a little eye exercising stuff.
Given that these were just teasers to show off of how I do stuff, I will definitely do my best to improve upon faults (e.g weird things you mentioned) and maintain the magic in these pages. My pace is.. well.. still dependent on my mood (just like you writers). I can do 2-3 pages at best per week (given I reviewed the parts needed to be included) and I really don't have my own scanner yet so that will be a problem I'm going to look into. Yes, this is kind of an incentive for you to speed up but don't mind my ramblings because when I was on a reading spree, I can't help but open your Misha Route section for updates
. Hmm, maybe I can work on the early chapters. I assume you already edited and proofread them but I will start seriously during our semestral break
Oh, and bulky part = the whole story.
Again, thanks for taking the time to post! Means a lot to me (and my self-esteem). Thanks! i am inlove with the misha in your story huhuhu