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by Dream » Fri Sep 07, 2012 1:20 am
Hanako's hand are too small and the fingers could have been drawn better, similar things with the book. The wrinkles in the clothing seem to be drawn/added in there just for being wrinkles and they don't seem to follow any movement, focus point (shoulders, hips, etc.) gravity or "rythm". Hisao's left leg looks off. They might be a bit too straight (the human body never is really straight at any moment) and their positions seems unrealistic/akward, although i'm not too sure of that. There seems to be some problems with perspective too (specially with the height/position of Hanako in relation to Hisao or their common ground) Shading is pretty OK overall although it seems you missed on some parts (I think you did Hanako's scars remarkably well by the way). Hisao's ear is placed wrongly, it should be higher among other adjustments. Hisao's expression looks dead/plastic, Hanako's expression is pretty good although i have a feeling she doesn't look like Hanako, might be my memory fucking up though.
Aside from that and other things i surely missed, it's a pretty good drawing indeed, shows a lot of promise, and you seem to be pretty good with colors.
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