15 minute Rin Doodle

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15 minute Rin Doodle

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Making her Rin was actually an aftertought and lack of wanting to draw decent arms. Done in MSpaint.
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Critique, but use silk gloves since I'm 14, AAAAA oh god.

Oh, and this is my first post too, so use DOUBLE-LAYERED silk gloves.
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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You ask for critique but want the critics to go easy?
I'm sorry, but if you ask for a critique then you have to be prepared for the worst. If you want a critique filled with fluff and sugar you can go to Deviant Art.

But I have to know, did you use a mouse or a tablet?
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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Well, that was mostly sarcasm. Go hard. I used a mouse, since my linework is shaky as hell.
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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Well, the lack of nipples and labia are kind of disturbing. Also, the placement of the belly button is awkward in comparison to the perspective.
Since it's anime, which is one of the easiest types of art to draw (makes me wonder why so many people still suck at it), you can't really say anything else about it since the style only comes off as "unorthodox".
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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Hm, that's all very solid. I'd shell out some excuse, but I don't see that to be necessary. I'll try polishing it sometime later.

But the real question is, that would you classify this as acceptable.
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bitpeg wrote:You ask for critique but want the critics to go easy?
I'm sorry, but if you ask for a critique then you have to be prepared for the worst. If you want a critique filled with fluff and sugar you can go to Deviant Art.
Lol, it's like someone going on to Facepunch asking how sexy he is and expecting phone numbers.
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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You're only 14? I must say that's way better than me at that age.

critique-wise:
her boobs are too high up, they're a bit lower down the chest, and the alignment in the body seems off.
Her face it very cute though!
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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I think this is as far as I'll go on my own. Thoughts?
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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The body looks all deformed. For example:
Her legs are like, fat. They need to match up with her hips down. Her right breast is smaller than her left, so they both need to be the same same and fix them so they need to look more round. Her expression isn't like here, whether that matters or not you decide. Shoulder composure is off, make them even out with each other. So your problem is disfiguring, angle, size and shape. Some basic key concepts that associate with human or animal drawings.
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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not bad for a 15 minute MS paint.

the only things i'd critique on it have already been said
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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I tried to fix some of my anatomy fuckups.
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Is there still something wonky, as I have next no eye for my own mistakes.
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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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Rin doesn't seem to have a pelvis.
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she looks pregnant :shock:

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Re: 15 minute Rin Doodle

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you're 14 and this is your art level
jeez, makes me feel noob again
have to say that it was not really good
but one of the best effort i seen on ms paint
work hard! :o
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