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So far, this story is shaping up to be okay, and I'm hoping it won't be abandoned like the other attempts at Naomi/Natsume routes, but there is one thing I noticed with this scene. After Hisao's heart episode, I think you missed the part where they end up in the nurse's office. It just goes from Hi...

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Act 1 Scene 4: Running the Press Hisao hits the track for some exercise. ___________________________________________________________________________________________...

Ah, I think I know what you meant now. There are indeed a few japanese classrooms that have two entrances - on in the front of the classroom and one further back. The VN never explicitly references this one way or the other, but there is at least one instance (maybe more) where Shizune and Misha bl...

Just caught up and while we're still in the early days of Hisao adjusting, you're taking it in a slightly different direction that's keeping me interested. Yuu being an artist is cool (he may get on with Taro!) and I'm interested to see just what Ayao's deal is... Good work, keep it up, etc etc :D ...

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Act 1 Scene 3: Dead News Hisao has some extra sleep. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________...

I shuffle through the books at random, plucking interesting spines off haphazardly. Naughty Hisao... Vandalizing the library on his first visit :-) We all know Hisao is a dirty rebel. I'll probably leave that there, simply because I liked the wording and tone it let off, tho. Albeit it could be mis...

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Act 1 Scene 2: Impromptu Interview Hisao's class ends, his first day hitting casually. Not like a freight train. ___________________________________________________...

Sharp-O wrote:Not a bad start, can't wait to get into the meat of the story!

Thanks! I'm gonna post one or two more parts tonight, I think. Right now I'm just sectioning off & giving the lot I have written already a few glances over pre-post.

I'm rambling: Just, thanks for the encouragement.

Welcome back! The story so far looks good, both grammar and style. Two small nitpicks: The section where Yuu and Ayao join the trio seems to be missing one or two words which makes it a bit confusing to read. Also 3-2 is for vision impaired students, but so far neither of them seems to ave problems...

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Act 1 Scene 1: Leftist Perspectives Point of divergence engage. And introduction of the main OCs involved. _________________________________________________________...

Overview: This is a route about a little-utilized club in Katawa Shoujo, and, specifically, one character who doesn't get nearly enough lovin'. Naomi Inoue is the epileptic classmate of Hisao, and one of the Newspaper Club's three members. Introduced alongside Naomi, is her close friend Natsume Ooe...

Thanksgiving weirdness aside, I really liked this. It was really cute and it's going to be hard reading about these two from that schmuck Hisao's perspective but if they're as fun as they are here, I'm sure it'll be enjoyable. Thanks! I was back and forth in the planning phase, on whether or not I'...

Manly Tea Time That shit… that shit had me fucking dying of laughter. Kenji has always been good for comedic relief, but this made him out as more, which was nice. The turnaround at the council meeting actually got me, tbh. The thought of Hisao staring at the pictures, then Mishizune, and back and ...

Edited the name and tweaked some of the formatting a weeeeeeeeeeeeeeee bit.

What got me even more than the notion of celebrating Thanksgiving in Japan, was the ease with wich they were able to acquire Cheddar. Most Japanese think eating coagulated milk is gross, and the only kind of cheese I was able to find in all the time I was there was the processed slices you need to ...