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All together, now: Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.

That pose puts this song in my mind.

I can't see them either.

http://i40.tinypic.com/24cccx2.gif Good show, Baconman. Damn good show. You did a fine job of developing your character, and she and her little world were a delight to read about. Loved the ending. :) I don't think anyone here would object to seeing more of your stuff. Perhaps you could find some k...

[puts on editor's hat] You should really lay off the parenthetical statements. They make the story look sloppy. If you want to convey something, describe it in the narrative. For example: "Blah blah bloobity blah," mumbled Jimmy. Or: "Blingy blangy bleen bloon," said Sally, mumbl...

Okay, trying my best to be mature about this. That was a very well-written sex scene. A very unusual one, to be sure, considering the nature of the participants, but I'd say you captured it very well. There's a real sense of sensuality conveyed here, not just mindless smut, and likewise, it reads li...

Catapults make everything better. This is a scientific fact!

There are some fandoms that just seem tailor-made for OCs, and this is one of them. It's a big school, after all. So I say unto you: Bring it on.

Also: D'awwww. Cute chapter.

Hey, pretty nice stuff. Keep up the good work!

I liked the bit about the visual novel. Very meta.

I have to agree in that the "script" format is a bit offputting, but, that aside, this is very well-written. Keep at it.

I'm usually content to lurk, but I just had to comment here.

Good show! As you know, Rin is my favorite girl, and I can tell you had lots of fun writing her. This story is cute, sweet and funny. Nicely done.

Sgt_Frog wrote:Anyway, many characters at Yamaku have health problems or other various disabilities that make it almost impossible to have a Mary Sue or Gary Stu-like character.

You'd be surprised. Fandom be's kwazy.

*puts on nitpicker hat*

It's "take this", not "have this".

*takes off nitpicker hat*

OMG SHOKYOOOOT!

Amy Poplar

What you did there. I see it.

I can't help but think that you could stand to insert more paragraphs. That said, good stuff. Very good. Definitely an interesting perspective for a sex scene. I like!